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12-22-03, 04:33 PM | #1 | ||||
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Distorted Mind..
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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=99371
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=100513 http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=100448 Distorted Mind: A Black Cloud Covers The Mind Of One’s Twisted Thoughts His Control Is Insisted Nought, As He Trembles Of Distant Roars Imagery In Mind Soars, As Light Shines Everywhere But On Him Whats Is This Sin? Punching Walls To Ease Fates Positioning He Cradles Air So Thin, Nothing To Caress His Tormented Soul As Voices Own His Soul, His Facial Expression Is Cemented Dull Distorted Thoughts: Percentage Full, As Mind Fights All Kind Of Logic The Real World? Far From It, From The Hollow Hits He Yells, “Stop It!” His Minds Passive Aggression, Subtle Whispers Clogs Up Memory “This The Hell In Me?” “How Can I Think With Distortion Instead Of Me” Am I Me? All Has Gone In A Downward Spiral, Where The Nearest Exit Uncontrollable Thoughts Flourish Past Me, Women Just Left It He’s Come To Expect It, Used To Opposites And Lifes Backstabbing Friends Is What He Lacks Having, As He Recalls Repressed Life Tracking He Cant Let Go, Troublesome Tragedies Overwhelm Thoughts Process Trying To Salvage Sanity, But Only To Capture All Of “Its” Excess Bland Tales Of Lies And Disruptions, His Heart Beat Strikes A Hoop I’ve Reached An Epiphany, And I Know Too Well It’s A Reoccurring Loop This Is Some Pretty Deep, Twisted Shit…Hopefully Ya’ll Will Understand Each Line..
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12-22-03, 05:46 PM | #2 | |||||||
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thought the flow got going for the most...the topic was ok...and the execution was the same.....some nice vocab and a moderate scheme...yeah...not bad..quite liked this...pZ
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12-22-03, 06:46 PM | #3 | ||||
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Thanks For Peepin It..
Up To The Top..
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12-22-03, 06:49 PM | #4 | |||||||
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This was very good. The way you desribed things and worded every line was really powerful Great vocab and way of setting up your thoughts. Very well done. If you have time can you hit up my battle in my sig or my open mic. Thanks.
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12-22-03, 07:02 PM | #5 | ||||||
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shit was fuckin crazy
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12-22-03, 10:06 PM | #6 | ||||||
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That was coo but you could create a better flo. Not to complexed like mine but you lack the flo. I make lyrics easy to read but when I rap it,it's the illest shit you ever heard.
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12-22-03, 10:21 PM | #7 | ||||||
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Daaaaamn kid, very nice!!! Liked the whole thing, good point of view towards this, and a great imagry. I liked the beggining how you got into it, nice job. Expect to see more like this, nice!!!
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12-23-03, 06:05 AM | #8 | ||||
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Thanks For The Replies..
I Thought There Would Be More.. Up To The Top.. Again..
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12-23-03, 01:03 PM | #9 | ||||
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N LitEnd
Flyweight Posts: 155 Joined: Aug 2003 From: ...... Status: Offline Battle Record: 7-0
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12-23-03, 01:16 PM | #10 | |||||||
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yo that was aight...coulda flowed a lil bit mo' i done one like that ages ago when i was high an it turned out pretty heavy.....i liked the way your words made me think....especially as some kats dont even make you wanna read on....nice bro...keep cummin'.
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12-23-03, 02:50 PM | #11 | ||||
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Any Vets Out There??
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12-23-03, 03:41 PM | #12 | |||||||
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Distorted Thoughts: Percentage Full, As Mind Fights All Kind Of Logic
The Real World? Far From It, From The Hollow Hits He Yells, “Stop It!” He Cant Let Go, Troublesome Tragedies Overwhelm Thoughts Process Trying To Salvage Sanity, But Only To Capture All Of “Its” Excess Bland Tales Of Lies And Disruptions, His Heart Beat Strikes A Hoop I’ve Reached An Epiphany, And I Know Too Well It’s A Reoccurring Loop ^^^^nicest lines to me....erm cant think of what to say, it got me a lil confused but i did enjoy it and did get the meanin nice stuff |
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12-23-03, 03:57 PM | #13 | |||||||
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nice drop.....hmmm, supreme vocab...good flow, good subject matter......not much to comment on....very deep wordplay,it confused me....lol.....nice.....
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12-24-03, 07:41 AM | #14 | ||||
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Thanks For The Replies..
Still Open For More..
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12-24-03, 02:34 PM | #15 | ||||
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