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01-01-05, 03:30 PM
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The Epitome Of Greatness
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Final Vs. Mista_Auth3ntik
IP: 3240 794D
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Battles Go Up Friday Check In Due Sunday By 11:59 PM Eastern Time Verses Due Tuesday By 11:59 PM Eastern Time Voting Ends Thursday By 11:59 PM Eastern Time 20 Lines Minimum 40 Lines Maximum No Biting No Recycling Do Not Go Over The Line Limit Or Under The Line Limit Meaning No Less Than 20 Lines No More Than 40 Lines You Must Vote On 3 Battles Per Week And Edit Them Into Your Check-In.. If You Dont Do So, Youre Banned From The Tourney The Following Week Topic: Racism
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01-01-05, 03:53 PM
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I walk & walk over you
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IP: A85A 251C
Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh hh
Final Damn~~! Final You Know Your My Boi, So Ha Lets Get It On Check Bitch
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01-01-05, 04:19 PM
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IP: D5FE 7245
lol werd...checkin in
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01-04-05, 04:11 PM
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IP: D5FE 7245
Please read all of the verse
this country is meant to associate ourselves with others
and respect them all regardless of their race or color to eliminate hate and bring joy to those less fortunate and gain assurance from povertry striken or rich corporates but some individuals dont take that kind of path in life and bring wrath to blacks,ricans or those fond of christ they introduce a new level of hate that slavery started still going on, not only blacks but now everyones the target this particular slaughter is protected by freedoms they claim unharmful victims brought to their fate by hitler and the kkk obviously crazy why do they do it are they more then deranged? they murder mothers and babies and say theyre not to blame no doubt we will all experience this in our days while were livin and ofcourse the government favors it.....its just well hidden crooked cops enforce it and it happens every single day roaming the streets lookin for a certain race to exterminate these people exist and theyre known to be devilish figures we have to hault them now before they get bigger and bigger not fair to those who did no wrong but get treated in this fashion called derogatory names theyre escalating and making new factions be strong and tall, be aware of the actions of these people keep your head up and strive forward for a smarter cerebral dont give away or sell your soul to stand as much as you can take stay vengeful and eliminate when your brains about to break and one day these cruel cold hearted people will vanish nomore racist slurs profoundly used to blacks and spanish then we'll be able to see the right opportunities and grab it we wont be bothered...they will fade off the face of the planet good luck ill drop vote links later i still got other verses to do... peace
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01-04-05, 09:16 PM
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I walk & walk over you
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IP: 3240 794D
I'D RUSHED 20 LINES
We would be chained up, tied to an tree and get whipped up Disobey your leader and you’ll get struck, to me slaved sucked Spring would rain over us while picking cotton on the field But our lives is not sweet. Blacks. My own people was being killed Our children was like puppies being sold to other white people This slave wasn’t going to stop, everyday is like an sequel Like an ugly ogre we wasn’t treated equally but differently Drink from the water fountain, Urine is what we was tasting. Cant eat at the same table have to go outside or get beat By white people, get jumped, stomped, knock your teeths They’ll Beat you, till you cant breathe, while they’ll be smiling Maniacal laughing “get out of here you niggers’ is what they be yelling This whole race beef is from the main point from the three k’s Driving around with an black kid on the bumper with an rope around his neck Its kinda scary when god created these black, and white killing them They’d hated Jew’s, Catholics, Blacks, they’d treated them like not an synonym When getting on the bus, we would sit in the back, but thank god of Rosa Parks She was brave enough, but that made more problems, burn crosses still sparked MR.X tried to lead but got gun down in his own church, blacks community shifted Martian Luther King change the world, but still got gun down, the world is still in racism
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01-04-05, 11:47 PM
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IP: 03A1 A28A
Hmm...insanely close battle...
Final...you had a nice vocab, nice flow, nice structure...nice metas...I didnt really feel any imagery comin from ya...couldnt really picture anythin'...you stayed on topic, but it sounded like a report to me...learn to use more imagery and try to have a story...that is what makes a dope topical...not bad, just elevate...7.5/10... Authentik...nice imagery...ya rhyme scheme was off a bit in places, but you had a story, and a nice imagery that kept flippin images in my mind...decent vocab, decent flow and structure...what got me was the imagary...damn...the story was good, and I liked your perspective...in my eyes, you get this...close as fuck tho...8/10... Vote- Mista Authentik... ...No hate. |
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01-05-05, 09:11 AM
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Odi et Amo
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IP: 2D89 9426
Wow, like Limited Edition already stated this is really close!
final : vocab, flow, structure were all tight, no bad comments on that cause it was straight on! You approached the topic in a more global way, talking about issues of the past, present and possibly future. But as the wise man above me said, it felt like a report. You just told us the facts and what we have to do and such but not really emotion or own experiences concerning topic. That's not necessary per se but you said everything very clear, hardly any imagery...you didn't make me stand still for lil while and think: "hmmm, what would he have meant by this?"....Too vague isn't good either but a bit more imagery and emotion would've been good. Very solid drop though! MiSta_AuTh3nTiQ : Final got the vocab but you surely got the emotion...flow n structure were tight, vocab was less compared to final. But the imagery and emotion were good...the way you approached the topic could've been expected (which isn't bad of course!) but i felt that with this story, you could've even put more emotion in it, less facts and more feelings, ya kno? But this drop is really nice, told story very well but might have been more deep at certain points... Okay, this one was really close...Final approached it on a more global, less personal way and that's why you don't find that much emotion in it but the vocab was dope for sure! MiSta_AuTh3nTiQ had a more personal drop so i expected a lil more emotion from his side, it's nice drop for sure but i wanted to feel the pain of what they been through, not just the facts cause everyone knows them... My vote goes to final...but damn this was close...but this is my opinion (i'd probly change few times in next hours but i'm sticking to this one lolz)...no hate btw...was tough to decide...
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01-05-05, 05:14 PM
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IP: D5FE 7245
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=169604
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=169609 http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=169605 theres my links...thats for the votes peace
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01-05-05, 05:29 PM
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IP: D5FE 7245
^i meant thanks for the votes...
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01-06-05, 03:52 PM
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Life is a Constant Battle
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IP: 21BF FAD9
gonna go with mista on this one for how he threw back his piece n had a personal view of what was going on at the time. I liked finals piece because it was a narrator of a racism story the u s has been going through. Both had good structure, flow, creativity, and imagery...i gotta go with mista for overall creativeness in the piece... if ya need more info on the battle let me know
v/ mista
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01-07-05, 01:32 AM
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The Epitome Of Greatness
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IP: 3240 794D
Mista_Authentik wins 2-1
Mista_Auth3ntik +4 final -2
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