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02-21-09, 03:00 PM | #1 | ||||||
New Jack
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After the Shots Fired...
IP: A1E4 9BCF
After the shots fired...
I just lay and reminice with quivering lips, amiss Not if I would of missed but why I didn't take the risk This shit? Is it worth it? Cuz now i'm feeling worthless I'm told I did the right thing... ... but have no grounds to support it My mind contorts with, notions and different choices Which are all blurred out by my consciences many voices But I rejoice in my sorrow, because my souls still alive because any joy I can conjure up to my mind is a bribe So maybe my mind just might end up letting me survive And not dive into the truth I'm just trying to hide With the judgement I lack, I struggle to keep my head intact Knowing that after the shot's fired, I can never get it back It sucks having a gun, because it comes with responsibility And it's that same thing that can haunt, and its killing me Wanted for three murders, I had the fucking guy Standing right in front of me, looking me in the eye Almost as if to say "Im READY TO DIE!"... ... but it's a lie ... So at gunpoint I scrample for thought, but heres the plight I have the Green light to kill, but do I read him his rights? With the judgement I lack, I struggle to keep my head intact Knowing that after the shot's fired, I can never get it back But heres the truth, the moment I saw him I checked my eyes And confirmed to myself it was someone I recognized someone I couldn't despise, so instead I stood speechless You might say I'm feeble, but how would you meet this? So as I took no action, the crook got to actin Whipped the heat out quick and I saw it flashin My reaction? A disaster, my sorrow's got me mad Cuz now i'm a failure as a cop, as well as a dad And after that? I couldn't live with myself.. so I stopped And I put the gun to my temple and I finished the job With the judgement I lack, I struggle to keep my head intact Knowing that after the shot's fired, I can never get it back |
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02-22-09, 01:03 AM | #2 | |||||
Maggot
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IP: 3240 794D
Yea man that was good.good rhyme Scheme. you should put the words to a track too. the only part i thought was kind've weak was the middle verse
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but other then that it was good. keep at it bro
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02-22-09, 09:04 AM | #3 | |||||||
Addicted
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IP: B158 C755
I was digging it, I'll agree that the 2nd verse was a little weaker but still was able to tell the story, the 3rd was dope but kinda ended quick, but the first verse I can't find how it really ties into the event, kinda sounds like the cop allready killed someone and he feels bad about it, then you jump into a murder who turns out to be his son, I dno't know, but was still pretty dope, I enjoyed it.
peace
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02-22-09, 02:23 PM | #4 | ||||||
New Jack
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IP: A1E4 9BCF
1st verse was right after he was shot
2nd verse was before he got shot 3rd was after the first. Appreciate the feed fellahs. |
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02-22-09, 09:38 PM | #5 | |||||||||||
Light Weight
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IP: 2210 2F31
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Dope entry, like the buidling Quote:
Feelin da hook Quote:
im feelin this, this is a nice touch, good way to end the second verse. Quote:
third verse is where you shine in my opinion... this on poiint here, i love imagery and the flow of the piece is dope. keep droppin homeboy stay up.
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02-22-09, 09:53 PM | #6 | |||||
Maggot
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IP: 1356 B750
The chronological verses are fuckin ill
make some beats and drop a song though the 2nd verse didn't match up quite well, you can fix that shit anyways, its nasty keep it up, Alpha
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02-23-09, 09:27 AM | #7 | |||||||
text.even geico can do it
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IP: 3AE9 A7D5
hehh.. glad I took the time out for this alpha. pretty dope set of verses, I like what you did with the order of it. I knew what you we're doing with the second and third. I didn't catch it off the riff. starts off dead on the floor lol, sick. and the whole inner message i was feeling too, he was a cop yeah, but your rite with a gun comes responsibility, and you better take initiative when the time comes or you could end up like this guy. nice shit alpha.
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02-23-09, 03:50 PM | #8 | ||||||
New Jack
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IP: A1E4 9BCF
Werd thanks for the feed.
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03-04-09, 07:09 AM | #9 | ||||||
Whys That?
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IP: 967B 85BD
2 links or fuck off.
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03-04-09, 01:39 PM | #10 | ||||||
Banned: Spamming
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IP: E075 E1FD
feelin dis shit good shit nice rhyme scheme and all my dude
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