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Old 05-04-05, 01:04 AM   #1
Detrimental
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L.C. 2nd verse spttin words that hurt
Puttin bitches in the dirt this game you serve not burn
I curse and blurt obnoxious explicit lyrics
Screamin fuck the world loud so all ya bitches hear it
I aint disappearin for awhile started at an early age
I'll be here for atleast another 2 decades
spittin venomous rage hey soon there'll be LC wannabes
Runnin around walkin, talkin and actin like me
Ya see i aint another Slim shady
But there will be debating on which mother fucker's me
Yea like 2 Pac Shakur screamin fuck the world
Like Eminem sayin i'll fuck your girl
like Bizzy Bone sayin i only fuck with soldjas
And like Jay Z sayin brush the dirt of ya shoulders
Like Mr Obra sayin we'll kick like a contraction
And now i'm screamin motha fucka Northside of Akron
That's what's happenin, walk thru traffic stop the action
Man i've had haters on my dick, i'm still laughin
Grab the gas and matches a lyrical difraction
Leave ya body in fractions , i explode like a chemical reaction
Watchin ya body contrast then move it out of its place
Pump a slug to ya chest bullets go flyin at ya face
Left without a trace, you know i'm still scratchin the surface
I'm like scrilla lurkin on the sidelines attackin with purpose
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Old 05-04-05, 01:12 AM   #2
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this was decent for a keytyle, some of it didn't make sense sometimes and ya flow kinda was off and on also. but i liked this bar here
Grab the gas and matches a lyrical difraction
Leave ya body in fractions , i explode like a chemical reaction
ya need to work on ya flow tho, alot of ya bars sounded choppy and sometimes it seemed like u just tried to put in big words as filler, unless thats your style. idk go wit what u want,only problem i see is ya flow, and maybe a lil better punches. but overall i give it a 7/10
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Old 05-04-05, 01:28 AM   #3
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complexity needs work, flow fell off in points
some decent concepts, but for a keystyle this was
aight, overall big city nailed alot of points about
your verse, try to expand on them thou
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i'll play on ya consience, ya contents is complete nonsense
speak of biting, then you fucks flip everyone of my damn concepts
what the fuck, was you high..?
did you think i wouldn't recognize lines that i made
then you come up some bullshit tryna prove that im gay...!
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fake fucks..move on...!
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Old 05-04-05, 02:31 AM   #4
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yet again ¤ÐÅž¤ you leave no link lol....leave a link i will return the favor.....but i seem to see you often in battles so if i see you in a battle i'll vote....uppin this shit
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Old 05-04-05, 02:32 AM   #5
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