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10-22-05, 02:20 AM
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IP: CF74 5D3A
For dinner had beef because candy’s bad for teeth
Shook and hidden over books I’ve written as chief Of rhyme have to face a thief sometime and that’s bazaar Catch hell from critics and they’re parasitic belong in jars With lid tight this kid write ill stuff, drink beer foam in bars Try to have a plan great like a landscape so talk to an architect On how to march correct and identify script keep your heart in check Bring the butter this is lyrical toast and spiritual toast for breakfast Spit piles of vapor that ends up on files of paper attractive Nouns ill like active compounds a real chemical laxative Girl in a skirt with ass is an inert mass of sex content Play complex rent for one night if it s done right like flint Sheets spark a deep part of passion, fashioned in quilts Coo-chee juice flows like a sluggish stream bedpost tilt Form love wish and cream cock deep with hot heat built To hang when soft Task is done after I blast guns on the streets with a sista Speak in a whisper like them dang yang yang twins kiss her She knows spoken French I’m stroking a wrench on my car Changing spark plugs dangling on smart dubs doing good so far She’s in for a long speech, take her home and reach a sexual Conclusion in which panties are torn and thrown this so textual Girl my room dense and perfumed with incense so lets kiss Along with a wet reminisce let me tongue you so brisk Miss |
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10-22-05, 03:58 AM
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10-23-05, 03:38 AM
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10-23-05, 10:12 AM
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Within Eternity's Wither
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IP: 3240 794D
wasn't no where near impressed especially for somebody to come in everyone else's thread like your a vet............on an alias..............but its plan to see your garbage........sorry this was thrash
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10-23-05, 10:52 AM
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IP: CF74 5D3A
Mr. Multie if you didn't have such a big ego you could eat rappers alive with your multi's you have no humor and your multi's are not comparable to every day speech if you can change that don't know rather i would be able to compete with you for example you look stupid calling this garbage
Spit piles of vapor that ends up on files of paper attractive Nouns ill like active compounds a real chemical laxative Girl in a skirt with ass is an inert mass of sex content Pay complex rent for one night if it s done right like flint Sheets spark a deep part of passion, fashioned in quilts Coo-chee juice flows like a sluggish stream bedpost tilt Form love wish and cream cock deep with hot heat built To hang when soft |
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10-23-05, 11:31 AM
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Coming to Kill you All
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IP: 9F3B 0487
This would sound good with audio...but on text...it's kinda messed.
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10-23-05, 01:20 PM
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IP: CF74 5D3A
Natural killa thanks for the props for real homey
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10-23-05, 07:07 PM
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Within Eternity's Wither
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IP: 0825 899A
i was almost touched............*sniffle* *sniffle*
and homie i don't have a big ego.............on the net an ego is pointless but you on some other shit post'n everywhere fo reasons unknown........ and its disrespectful to do the shit you do but like i said this is the net so have a nice day......don't worry i won't respond to any other pointless post by you
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10-23-05, 07:31 PM
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Just searching.
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IP: 3F7D ED7B
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...wait...for one...I don't think what you say is comparable in every day speech...I don't see people going 'Hello' 'Coo-chee juice flows like a sluggish stream bedpost tilt Form love wish and cream cock deep with hot heat built' '...Good day to you too.' So no, no one really rhymes in real life... Maybe you'd be a good... no... maybe you'd stop being so annoying if you didn't have an ego |
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10-23-05, 07:33 PM
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IP: 3F7D ED7B
By the way...
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...Yes. About everyone calls this garbage, and those who don't say 'it's mediocre' and you go 'thanks for the props'. When someone gives you real feedback that doesn't say you're the greatest, you explode and you're the one who looks stupid as fuck. |
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10-23-05, 07:34 PM
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Within Eternity's Wither
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IP: 0825 899A
can i borrow fluffy?
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10-23-05, 07:36 PM
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Within Eternity's Wither
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IP: 0825 899A
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Go easy on him for he not knows what he's done oh and did you leave feedback on my OM Blood on the carpet and in the close yet?
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10-23-05, 07:42 PM
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Just searching.
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IP: 3F7D ED7B
Depends. Did I?
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10-23-05, 08:37 PM
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HA! HA! Mr. Multie tried to score and got laughed at bu thades you picked the part where i'm thinking to myself and my subconscious mind think that way
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10-23-05, 09:13 PM
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IP: 8E7F 1337
okay QueerBag oh i mean Gladbag haha (lol dont take it personally im just havin fun)
ur lyrics is defitnly up there but i think u got so caught up wit tryin ta get some ill multies that ur shit started ta not make any sense...kinda just focus on what message ur tryin ta get out to the public and start tellin it and ur multis kinda come automaticully and then it'll be more impressive cuz ur spittin wordz that fit wit each other and is speakin on the same thang so kinda try ta provoke urself from forcin ur rhymes...ur punchlines were so-so some of them were dope and others were corny as hell...but you'll improve if u keep on tryin...structure was ight, not perfect but not to the point where it was horrible niether so u did so-so on that too...so u get a 6.5/10 keep on elevatin youngsta....yo now RTF on my o.m..its called "Our Society" http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=212478 go peep that shit and leave feedback and i'll appreciate it...thanx lotz youngsta |
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