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Old 12-26-03, 06:51 PM   #1
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Talking Anticipation of Sex

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My desire lust and craving’s got me wishing to leave, I wanna join you, wanna feel you, want you inside of me. So pick me up from the next flight, I’m on mah way to 'Heights. I’m rushin in a hurry so time stops and seems blurry, But no worries coz in my vision you’re more than an apparition, You’re my life’s passion, it’s true, and it’s my mission to please you. So every time that I see you, whatever you want I will do, Whenever you want, I will be there
To take it and lick it, I’ll ride it and give it. Coz what we have I can’t deny…only shared by you and I. Picture it as we kick it, strippin down and gettin naked, The force of passion…can you take it? Through all night’s hours…can you make it? The excitement’s got my breath coz babyboy you are the best
As you take me in your arms, squeeze the breasts and caress the rest, I see this kiss as forever coz I don’t want it to ever end, You slip it in while we’re kissin, the pleasure’s more than I envisioned
Ride me hard, stroke me soft, make me moan, scream and shout. Hours of satisfaction, the perfect penetration and lasting erection…In anticipation I’m thinking of the blessing that’s you…
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Old 12-27-03, 01:23 AM   #2
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nice shit but u need to work on structure
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Old 12-27-03, 03:08 AM   #3
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in all honesty...

this was extremely basic... i guess because this is such a great topic to write about, that i expected more... rather than something you'd write in the 9th grade to your boyfriend... i was feeling your other piece compared to this one... keep elevating...
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Old 12-27-03, 05:56 PM   #4
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Haha, thanks Jes..that's what I was looking for.
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