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12-31-03, 02:58 PM | #1 | |||
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! Walter Wall vs Peepers !
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Verse's due Jan. 7 Votes due Jan. 10 Lots of time to avoid no shows and homos .. pzzzZ topic Babies Dreams
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12-31-03, 05:25 PM | #2 | ||||||
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01-02-04, 04:26 AM | #3 | ||||||
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plenty of time till verses are due.....gl
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01-08-04, 12:52 AM | #4 | ||||||
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A Babie's Dream....
... A parallel world where my future and past collides Unknown tasks undefined, a guessing game decides Confessing my dreams, proclaiming any gaining’s You see I’m stuck in the seams, without trainings A seed unleashed, a deep beast not yet deceased Infinite possibilities as opportunity turns a knob greased My dad pleased, buying blue bed sheets and wallpaper My mom pleased, guiding the plans to make me safer My sibling uneasy, sweating the days when he's alone I drift off into a state where I miss all of the show Dreaming of a world where my potential is able to grow Dreaming of a world where equality is on the table to show The fable is known, my dream is the dream of everyone Is seems we all want some fun, to put ahead number one Ourselves, success, carefree with no stress to be blessed I guessed this was the normal of this world, but I surely jest When in the womb, I had dreams of something profound But now I’m ina tomb, dead after a lifetime in bounds My original dreams unfulfilled because of various means I was a teenage bombshell screaming for pleasant scenes Murdered for my beliefs and protests on grief’s and incest My brief life can only say how ironic was my in-utero dreams Compared to the the Hamptons, a Compton ghetto only personifies a brutal theme Last edited by Peepers : 01-08-04 at 01:42 AM. |
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01-08-04, 06:30 PM | #5 | ||||||
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Both earned an extension thanks to Walter Wall.
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01-09-04, 01:36 AM | #6 | ||||||
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I was getting better but….
The tension in my tendons is still test'n me to break I should wash up but I cant stop watch'n soaps, it aches Stated often, Im the same as u and every wide eyed waitress And Id go eye to eye with God if only he werent faceless I base this theory on conglomorations of expendages....wasted Cant take this sobreirty sincerly sorry to be loud but I found it tasteless Lady liberty's a foreigner, coroner howd she die of a face lift? Ill take this spacegoat phaze hope nonexistent, wav’n my fists like pistons Ready and pumped for war, I had an uncle sam who died...I don't miss him Im not impressed with death and what he'll bless, set in my optimistic mess Tresspassed back to my mind state after I passed out on the capital steps Took me down to the station and took the freedom within me carried Feels as if the world’s reaching its final days, this nightmare’s scary I’m just a young man with hopes and dreams to be oppression free But now my girlfriends pregnant and the sight of the sonogram taunts me His little head fills with Ideas that will one day be silenced The future disgusts me, my rage springs to life and gets violent Mother Earth is an air head so I take a needle filled with her thoughts Air into my veins and my words become my regrets…at a loss And as I say good-bye to by baby as I struggle to the floor I hope that he’ll dream, and it'll come true…to never be ignored Last edited by Walter Wall : 01-15-04 at 01:42 PM. |
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01-09-04, 09:09 PM | #7 | ||||||
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upp'n...
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01-11-04, 12:27 AM | #8 | ||||||
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VOTE!
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01-11-04, 12:36 AM | #9 | |||||||
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damn.............its shitty everythings gettin mad slept on........nyce drops by both, flow almost ruined both also............tha breakdown:
Peepers: rhyme scheme-7.5, flow- 6, story-7, total= 20.5 Walter: rhyme scheme- 8, flow- 6, story-8, total= 22 nyce drops.......peepers yours was deep but wasnt as original of an idea as walters, vote walter, good luck fellaz, peace, 1
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01-11-04, 06:12 PM | #10 | ||||||
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im gonna have to disagree with kilo.
Dreaming of a world where my potential is able to grow Dreaming of a world where equality is on the table to show The fable is known, my dream is the dream of everyone Is seems we all want some fun, to put ahead number one ^fav part of peepers Cant take this sobreirty sincerly sorry to be loud but I found it tasteless lady liberty looks like a foreigner, coroner howd she die of a face lift? ^fav part of walter however, i could not catch most of the flow for walter. peepers' was a little bit choppy here n there, but i could vibe most of it. v - peepers |
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01-12-04, 01:10 PM | #11 | ||||||
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^if ure a newbie who couldnt vote in frontlines then shouldnt be able to vote here
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01-12-04, 05:48 PM | #12 | ||||||
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..im IN this tournament. status quo.
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01-12-04, 08:17 PM | #13 | ||||||
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lmao
shot down walter good battle, more votes |
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01-13-04, 10:31 AM | #14 | |||
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walter did get sonned there ..
but regardless, first of all i'd like to apoligize for my inactivity around here it will get better, but as for this battle i was nothing short of impressed. you each took the topic from a different viewpoint, and i respected both displays of writing equally. i think that peepers edged this out because he had more style and flow in his ryhme scheme. you both did a nice job. thank you for showing . v. peepers
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01-14-04, 01:53 PM | #15 | ||||||
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More votes!?
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