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12-25-03, 10:04 AM | #1 | ||||||
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±Clear Skies±
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Look for Clear Skies in Distance with Teary Eyes Persistant;
kept Wishin for Death because when I Wrote none Listened saw the Visions my Lyriks made Sense; Oppurtunity to Vent; when Rules Bent I lost Looked above for guidance to be Sent the Skies Fell collapsed under Life looked down at the Strife; it Braught me the Life to continue the Ongoing struggle to Write lost Sight of the Rights I had to continue on in the continues fight fuck whats Mine I take it all Away all for Days to live for Pay; Clouded thoughts and Sunless Rays wish but none will be Saved. quick preview |
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12-25-03, 10:21 AM | #2 | ||||||
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IP: C1DA C961
saw the Visions my Lyriks made Sense; Oppurtunity to Vent;
when Rules Bent I lost Looked above for guidance to be Sent the Skies Fell collapsed under Life looked down at the Strife; it Braught me the Life to continue the Ongoing struggle to Write ^^That shit thurr is straight up DOpe and Truth....Good Flow..Vocab.....Holla back.... |
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12-25-03, 10:26 AM | #3 | ||||||
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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...448#post1016448
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...15&pagenumber=1 http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...458#post1016458 Last edited by Ackusation : 12-25-03 at 10:33 AM. |
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12-25-03, 11:55 AM | #4 | ||||||
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IP: 3A76 93FE
Levitate.
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12-25-03, 12:25 PM | #5 | ||||||
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IP: 1152 17A5
Words = 7/10
Entetainment=5/10 punches=4/10 Overal = 5/10 elivate |
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12-25-03, 12:54 PM | #6 | ||||||
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IP: 3A76 93FE
There were know punches within the pieces you idiot.
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12-25-03, 01:26 PM | #7 | |||||||
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umm some good vocab in this peice and decent flow.......but you need to elivate a bit
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12-25-03, 01:51 PM | #8 | ||||||
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IP: 3A76 93FE
Lmao, upping for someone with more then 1 liners.
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12-25-03, 03:00 PM | #9 | ||||||
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iight, i saw this one a little deep, it had ok vocab, the flow was pretty even all the way thru, id give the originality a 7/10, this was an ok piece, like sed b4, just need to elivate a little bit n ull be the shiznit, iight, peace
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