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04-01-04, 07:30 PM | #1 | |||||
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even good dogs bite
IP: 3240 794D
hook: fuck da r.i.p./and eveyone up in it/shut ya'll mouths/and listen up/
im tired of ya'll stupid fools/say what you say i still dont give a fuck now listen up all ya'll got sumtin to say there's bout to be a fight so get outta my way g-duce you the learder but you dont make hits you may be good but you still aint shit you dont hit me back when ever i want my shit is hot but you dont put in a thaught i said fuck the rip did that make you mad put a hole in ya heart and make you sad baker boy are ya here you betta listen you missed the target like gettin horny while pissin now probely your thinkin whats up wit this kid merkin us not knowin what we did but it's kinda simple if you think about it you could'nt even said no ya had to stingy about it could'nt reply eveytime i post you got me there sittin gatherin hopes but baker boy i just used you as a steppin stone and look where im at sittin on the open mic throne your okay i aint that hard on you just that your whole crew sucks the leader just like you if i was in your shoes i woulda left mounths ago now you gotta compeat wit others just to keep your spot so flow flow bitch flow like never before o wait you never had a good flow since the age of four and that was when you read a dr. suess book and added a beat you had the whole kindergarden class up on there feet g-duce dont go i aint done wit you yet ya whole crews dogs now they really need a vet(eran) hahaaaaa so if anyone got another part they would like to in about hatin da r.i.p please just post it and i'll laugh just like now
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04-01-04, 10:54 PM | #2 | ||||
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not bad diss...
not hard enough imo.. need 2 make ya shit more complex.. keep droppin n elevate son peace
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04-02-04, 01:58 AM | #3 | ||||
Bann The Deed NOT The Breed
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IP: 6804 D41F
yea like he said elevate work on vocab and mutis
who the fuck is rip????????
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04-02-04, 04:58 AM | #4 | ||||
....Trunks R 4 Bodies....
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IP: C1DA C961
i liked it holla..........
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04-03-04, 08:21 PM | #5 | |||||
..Intelligent Hoodlum..
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IP: 9DA6 C725
wonnnnnttt feelin it dissing my homie g-duece
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04-04-04, 01:34 PM | #6 | |||||
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IP: C1DA C961
and i'm suppose to care how... please inform me i would love to know
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04-04-04, 06:46 PM | #7 | |||||||
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IP: 4792 68BF
Nice diss I'm new to this board who is R.I.P.?
fav lines: baker boy are ya here you betta listen you missed the target like gettin horny while pissin ^^^good average punch 1st line was ghey tho second was strong. g-duce dont go i aint done wit you yet ya whole crews dogs now they really need a vet(eran) ^^^strong finisher I liked it IMO worst lines: and that was when you read a dr. suess book and added a beat you had the whole kindergarden class up on there feet ^so what u saying is he was ill when he was 4 years old, but now he's shit I think those 4 lines are shit IMO your okay i aint that hard on you just that your whole crew sucks the leader just like you ^was that supposed to be hard iunno. ok this diss (if you can call it that) really lacked creativity, and complexity. Ur punchs where soft at best, and at timez u seemed to big them up . Thats the worst thing u could do in a diss is big somebody up, and another thing I I I I I Me Me Me u gotta stop with this I, and me shit man no1 wants to hear some1 diss some1, and they talk about themselfs. The object of a battle is to unleash an all out attack on some1. think back to when em beat pop doc (yah it's only an example, and I know it was all writen), but you see how he just kept attacking and attacking u had the idea, just ur punchs weren't very complex nor affective. Also wtf where you're personals? I did not see 1 in that, and a personal is wayyyyyyyyy better then a punch any day. This piece lacked complexity in punches. It had no personals, and wasn't overly creative all in all I would give this a 3/10 and the only reason you would get a 3 is because of those 2 decent punchs, and ur flow structure was nice. U might ask urself why ur piece wasn't that good well omg look at ur fucking word usage man a kindergartner could have wrote that shit lol. Next time dig up some dirt on opponents before dropping something against them it should give u more to work with. What I did like about this piece was the flow structure, and it didn't seem forced u got ur point across that they're assholes, and they treated u like shit No hate just feedback keep elevatin read a book, and learn some new words.
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04-05-04, 06:58 PM | #8 | |||||
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damn that was the best feedback in the whole shit here
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04-05-04, 07:30 PM | #9 | ||||||
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IP: 3240 794D
yeah pretty much what they said. keep up what your doin and you will elevate soon.
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