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08-19-05, 02:48 PM | #1 | ||||||
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Putting It Down
IP: CF74 5D3A
Putting It Down
A thug mean solid like a submarine proud of my torpedoes But in order to launch one had to beat a off a cloud of mosquitoes Experience motion galore on the ocean floor a whale Of a job and the fish scales are odd see a mermaid female Underwater my ship navigated and my script dilapidated Like rotten wood picked cotton good this crap educated Being thug alive and mean is like to subscribe for a magazine And this brother is yet to be on cover of JET in a dew rag green Rapping script but as captain of ship stay fit for a crown Make legit rounds in my vessel no life reserves for nitwit clowns Use the process of intimidation pass on knowledge Like the cold and bold administration of a college Afraid of the professor “what are my grades for this semester”? “Well MADD you flunked”, just cake in the mix the date Were fixed to my exam that night assumed a cup of gin late With one gulp my friend great tasting and less filling Stress was thrilling me |
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08-19-05, 03:59 PM | #2 | ||||||
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IP: CF74 5D3A
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08-19-05, 04:23 PM | #3 | |||||
Black Poet
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IP: 6008 2A1B
Sup yeah this was alright u know, wasn't really feeling the opener I
thought your rhyming was too predictable, but as the verse went on it got better... I liked this bar..... Underwater my ship navigated and my script dilapidated Like rotten wood picked cotton good this crap educated It flowed well at times, ok vocab,... it was alright stay up homie. 1- |
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08-19-05, 04:40 PM | #4 | ||||||
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IP: CF74 5D3A
CriTiC thanks for the props and bein ghonest for real
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08-19-05, 04:47 PM | #5 | |||||||
Nt Your Average
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IP: 8231 5C7E
ehhhh..... its betta than most of ya other shit erm work on expandin a vocab n make all lines rhyme overall 6/10 definitly ya best shit but still you need to elevate n stay on point
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08-19-05, 08:19 PM | #6 | ||||||
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IP: CF74 5D3A
-UNF- easy 81/2 lines not stretched like most posts hit hard and heavy the vocab was good enough this iks not a grammar show a dang freestyle board act like you know (anyway thanks for responding)
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08-19-05, 08:25 PM | #7 | |||||
GeNeRaL
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IP: 05EA A558
this was some good shit right her but expand your vocab and youll be alright
7.5/10 r/f http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=205090 |
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08-19-05, 08:44 PM | #8 | ||||||
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IP: CF74 5D3A
NaRc-UzI thanks for the props for real homey
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08-19-05, 08:53 PM | #9 | ||||||
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IP: CF74 5D3A
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08-19-05, 10:34 PM | #10 | |||||
got u all confused n shit
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IP: 221E 9DCB
This was cool better than most of ya drops...
but yea work on yo vocab thats vital......... and don't use words thats no on ever heard...tha type of shit college professors use...than you juss trying to hard but yeah ya flow was on at times but i geuss overall i'll give this drop a 6.5/10
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08-20-05, 01:00 AM | #11 | ||||||
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IP: CF74 5D3A
.Merkage. NOPE 81/2 BECAUSE IT IS OBVIOUS EVERYONE CAN'T MULTI-RHYME NOT AN EVERY DAY THING AROUND HERE (WELL ANYWAY THANKS FOR PEEPING)
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08-20-05, 01:12 AM | #12 | |||||
A Life Of Chryme
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IP: 7BE2 A0A1
not a bad piece, nice structure...even though for the half line lol....gave it good flow felt it good concept....ur vocab....didnt even know what a couple words meant lol dilapadated? yea lol...anyways nice drop 7/10 keep it up......and rtf on my new o/m which will be out in a couple days
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08-20-05, 01:42 AM | #13 | ||||||
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IP: CF74 5D3A
NiggaPlease THANKS FOR THE PROPS AND CRITIQUE
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08-20-05, 01:46 AM | #14 | |||
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IP: 2029 97B3
flow..flow was good..multis were there like always..it enhanced the flow a lot..still..i would like to see a piece from you that has one main concept..and stick to it throughout the whole thing..but ya flow was good and everything..i'd give it a 6 or 7
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08-21-05, 08:29 PM | #15 | ||||||
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IP: CF74 5D3A
thanks for the props on this one for real yall
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