It's kind of hard, growing up in these times trapped in this state of crime/
where I'm surrounded by criminal minds//

Where criminals shine, and everywhere I go is danger/
And fenes are hooked on drugs like a coat is to a hanger//

It's crazy how many people die right here on this soil/
While bush is so stuck on Iraq fighting for Saddam's oil//

It brings me to a boil, I get hot at this political litigations/
Because blacks still haven't recieved their slavery reperations//

All this frustration, my mind is doing tricks like a circus/
All the killing is really worthles, tell me what is the purpose//

Illegal searches and seizures make streets hot like a fever/
Gettn' 25 to life will make you a strong believer/

That, there is a better way than to hustle/
But it seems like the only way other wise we just struggle//

That's not what we're here for we need more/
Our children starving, crying, curled up on the floor// our everday war

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It's Marvell man don't act sassy// Or i'll leave you like a used tampon, stiff, bloody and nasty//


"Blessings of life to the children, they say life is like 5 days, words of an oldman in a wheelchair, with silver hair, his eyes where bloody, while describing what lies before me, said evil b*tches and jealous men would try to destroy me, it occured to me this old ni99as words couldn't be realler, i'm on top now slightest drama i have to kill ya, cause animals sense weakness, sharks smell blood in water, ismail mosses and joe, move in devine order, sh*t is plastic material having no life, crash whips and leave 'em know matter the price, as long as I survive hop in the five, circle the block where the beefs at and park in front of my enemies eyes, we see that it's war we're gods children, see what we livin is real, aint no heaven or hell, dead is dead f*ckers, and your soul is with god, your mind keeps lurking the earth watching your own murder reoccur" - Nas

Good job. Scheme was off on parts. Seemed like you were going to stick to the scheme, then u got off of it. But its iight. The flow was good, along with the structure. I liked it. You got ur point across, and thats really all that matters. Overall, good job. Keep it up. Much respect.

I can see how the circumstances we grow-up in can make success seem so far fetched. It's a struggle, in which you did point out in your drop. I was feeling your vibe, but it kind of went from one area to the next. Not so much as to take away from the general sense or flow, but enough to be noticed. You had me interested in reading your points and views but at the same time I found myself distracted. The distraction came from the sense that you could have elaberated more on certain elements or incorperated better imagery. Either way, I think you should ad to this fill in the areas that are most troubling to you. Tell us what you propose should be done and why. Emotion was there, your flow seemed to be forced in certain areas. I have the same problem sometimes, but hey where all trying new things here.

On a political level I think this was very vauge and lacked detail. When making a political statement you need to offer more for your auidence to chew, so to speak. Politics are heavy and complex, they deserve to be presented in such a way to support and fortify your arguments. Just my two centz, if it's even worth that. I differ where your political statements are made but in general I enjoyed this drop. No need to get into a political debate, just making an observation.

~Bounce~

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that was a good piece. -from beginning to end. it had nice a flow and was very meaningful. it's good to take a step back and see where the war really is.

Much respect