Dynasty Soldiers Presents: Death the Freestyle

As I watch above the world I used to live in
I think back and thats where my life first started to begin
This is Death that Im living in today
I remember how I didnt want to die and how much I used to pray
Never wanted to expereince Death and I loved the world,I wanted to stay
Death is a horrible expereince and it can take your soul
But once you die your whole soul turns into burning coal
No matter if it`s murder,shooting, or old age
Your life must end because Death has its own stage
You can die being shot from a 12 gage
You can die being murded by a guy that is just rage
You can die having your heart stop inside your rib cage
I hate this Death,I wanna escape
For females they can die by just being raped
That has never happened to me cause Im a male
I cant stand this Death situation so I begin to wail

THE END
Presented by Dynasty Soldiers

Shut up punk ass..................i dont need to hear from you.Im doing this to reprsent Dynasty Soldiers and if you got a problem wit dat, we are up fo a challenge. Till then,shut ur mouth bitch. Im lookin to hear from positive rappas,not some gay ass newbie.

Shut the fcuk up ya twat i might be a newbie but ur losin 5-0 on ya battles so shut the fcuk up and oh ye i boned ya mom

Keep on poppin that shit ya poppin,
cause i ain't stoppin cause you ain't stopin me,
i aint got to prove shit to ya,
so ya lick the balls an keep on walkin

Dick!

This was a nice Open Mic dawg I Love It soooo much and I hope you Love it to people lol, welp people give more feedback on my homeboy'z open mic right here presented by Dynasty Soldiers, it had weak vocab, but good structure, and good flow, and ok wordplay elevate some Unknown your getting there

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Death is a horrible expereince and it can take your soul
But once you die your whole soul turns into burning coal
^^ nice line
I hate this Death,I wanna escape
For females they can die by just being raped
^^ bad line
other than that nice elevation
and newb queer stop qoutin eminem
and if the vote count is 5-0 that would mean he won you dumb fuck!

DUMBASS NEWB!

lookin good there unknown, ur comin along nicely...
and the dynasty soldiers presents thing is coo...
but anyways, ur flow was fucked lol... and vocab wasn't quite on point, but thats ok... keep gettin at it, ur gettin better...