Chorus:
You start a new school or summin But theres always that one that wants to
fuck with you
acting like its you n that hes stuck with you
its all bullshit

Ayo you start a new school, theirs always that kid who's ignorant
They wanna take it out on you coz of what their parents did to them
So their on the look out for something to put their fist though
they see ya cool n wanna start a fucking beef with you
You think o im older, all that shit has been left in the past
You meet, he slips a comment in, you dont react n das when it starts
The kid who nobody really likes, he just wants to be cooler
So he figures his popularity i'll grow if he makes you look smaller
He knows that your fresh n he knows that he's stail
He's an ignorant pick with an ego the size of a whale
He's itching away at ya surface like some sort of infection
You wonder why the whole class cool with me except him
He must have indigestion coz he cant seem to swallow ya existence
Coz he knows your better thats why he's always bitching
At the same time pitching wack little disses that don't affect ya
As his nothing to your strength just a minor little testor

You start a new school or summin but theirs always that one that wants to
fuck with you
acting like its you n that he's stuck with you
its all bullshit

What should I do should I smack this kid n just break his nose?
Hang him upside then in front of the class nick his watch n take his doe
The situation might not be as fucked up as it is, is blown up?
Should we settle with our fists or just act like grown ups?
You just cant help it when fists start to break closure
all that maturity dies, its like da devil takes over
You got him in ya eyesight, you got him in ya vision
You got ya fists clenched n wondering should i hit him
Or should I let it go, we're both new, we might grow a freindship
Nah I doubt it man, its like our freindship has already ended
Violence is a last resort , but it might be something i gotta do
coz its impossible,immature cunt maybe he's parents got divorced
N his stressed n just wants someone to divert his anger to
But if he fucks with me, i'll nick his watch, wallet, and his shoes
Then leave him in a pool of despair, drowning in his sorrows
dreading the very sight of me, have him dreading tommorow
Coz im not to be pushed as my temper is hollow.....

Acting like it's you n that his stuck with you
kid is a faggart he prolly lookds up to you

Everything seems to go smooth but then the journey starts to shake
Instead of being filled with happiness, ya bodies filled with hate
But I guess that fate, how nothing ever runs smoothly
Except im in place n its gunna take more than a tug to move me
Im strong n toughened up, thats mentally and physically
im on a planet by myself n skill wise none of ya'll can visit me
So little mishaps like this don't even so much as graze my knees
My temper won't break so theres no longer a need to pray for me
But its nothing new, I know that these kids all wanna beef with you
Pretend their ya freinds, sit n eat with you but who they really speaking too
I ain't got the time for shit like this, im 17, im growing up
Plus I don't beef with maggots that just know they sux
Some people man they just set out to annoy you, set out to destroy you
Violence is a last resort, fuck it kid their damn head in n kill their boys too

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O yea n the chorus would kick in again but i forgot to add it

Shit Was Str8 Cuz It Flowed Real Well, R U L.o.x (living Off Experiance) Wit Dis Situation

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thx man...appreciated, anymore feedback? i will return it if ya like

ayo it cant be dat bad lol cmom people

im not a bed ya'll so dnt sleep on me..............................................

ayo come on dnt let my pen skills go to a total waste...i think it was boring then tell me lol jst put summin at least

Not bad at all man 8/10 keep it up

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Vocabulary: Okay
Flow: Good
Structure: Okay
Concept: Decent
Topic: Decent
Favorite Lines:
Ayo you start a new school, theirs always that kid who's ignorant
They wanna take it out on you coz of what their parents did to them

Rating: 7/10
Advice: Some lines didn't even rhyme. The topic was decent. You misspelled a shit load of things, which is something that annoys me when it happens on purpose because it makes the best piece seem lazy as fuck. The vocabulary was decent, nothing astounding there. Just keep elevating.

RTF on Dead Beat Holiday(which is really entitled Pharaoh's Sarcophagus, I just made a mistake.)

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