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Old 04-23-03, 02:13 AM   #1
Mental God
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i need some feedback guys

IP: 298E E608

since the first day i looked in my girls eyes\\
i knew we would last, thats why i tell her no lies\\
i love her so deeply, she is my best friend\\
i know shes the one, i'll be with till the end\\
i try to be the best person, thats in her life\\
because one day i want her for a wife\\
we are both still young, and still immature\\
but whenever im with her, my worlds a blur\\
not because im scared, but because shes so sweet\\
it must have been destiny, for us to meet\\
her smile is bright, and it lifts my spirit\\
her beauty is amazing, theres no girl that can miror it\\
it would pain me to see her with any other guy\\
because shes like weed, she makes me feel high\\
when were together, i dont wannabe apart\\
and these have been my feelings, from the very start\\
at first we were shy, now we are always together\\
its like when i was little, straped to my mom with a tether\\
but this aint a tether, that i wanna run from\\
just thinking about you, makes my whole body go numb\\
i love you more than ive loved anyone before\\
as more time goes by, i'll love you more and more\\

quick keystyle, lookin for some feedback
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Last edited by Mental God : 04-23-03 at 04:21 AM.
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