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02-27-05, 01:41 PM | #1 | |||
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.:: Heart of Ink ::.
IP: 3240 794D
I pour ink onto paper, and blood soon follows,
released through my callouses and blisters, as my body is torn and my veins turn hollow. My pride is swallowed, through an eternity, through the plague of spewed propaganda and threats, and I'm no longer up to being gritty. I can not guarantee for me to forever be here, yet finally I'm taking a vacation from the inevitability, of a corrupt world, full of interminable doses of fear. As I feel the tears from the seams from my own words as I run out of garnet for the rivers that cascade from my wounds, yet for some reason I long for the chirping of birds and for galloping herds, to once more bring peace and innocence. Long lost through centuries of spilt blood for power, and the streams of the red looping through cities ever since. No one can survive on wits; there is only the ability to kill or be killed, by the enemy that is all but you, and the blood-sucking leeches of humanity who've had their fill. |
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02-27-05, 05:18 PM | #2 | |||||
<<-Carpe Noctum->>
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IP: 3240 794D
i love the title of this piece, and as you go on writing, it takes a different toll, then your heading suggests, thats dope, i was expecting one thing and i was surprised by the change of direction, nice job on this poem, your words were filled with emotion, hence why you use emotional words, describing words, great piece. keep it up.1
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02-27-05, 05:39 PM | #3 | |||||
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IP: 93C0 D1DD
The Title Was Cool, But THe pome Never Matched, Try To Stay On The Topic, And See What Happens Just Write What Comes To Your Head About The Subject, Pretty Good Piece Man....
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