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Old 04-10-03, 03:16 PM   #1
Freestylemyrhyme
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Adive...Quick Spit

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ight heres da flow...

you rappin bout shit you dont know//
thinkin u a tough guy and gangsta//
oh boy you dont even know//
you dont even know where u be//
i'm da sickest out there u'll eva see//
cuz i'm da next fuckin white mc//
ima girl that spits so fast//
u be amazed how long i can last//
cuz when i'm offered a battle, trust me i dont pass//
but after diss is done i'ma gonna knock u on ur wanna be black ass//
this game aint for lil kids//
this aint like pokemon//
cuz once ur lose, i'm sorry but u gonna be gone//
first you earn respect//
and trust me thug this isnt something u want to neglect//
you gotta be quick//
so quick thats u make ur rhymes real sick//
dont be shitty like pdiddy//
and dont stop to pause just like fuckin nas//
do u get this shit, do you comprehend?//
cuz this is it nigga i'm not sayin it again//
just stick to ur rhymes//
and you'll be fine//
just make sure none of your beat are out of line//



quick spit
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Old 04-10-03, 03:38 PM   #2
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That was weak Kid..

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Old 04-10-03, 03:39 PM   #3
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I think u meant for something different than what u put down. Things seemed to simple and not thought through very well. Keep dropping though.


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Old 04-10-03, 03:40 PM   #4
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aight i see that you're a new mc so you got time to work but check it there is alot of work for you to improove on such as complexcity, vocab, flow, you need to uppin your skills alot now i''m not tryin to diss i'm just doin you a favor unlike must cats on this site, but baby girll listen to what you're gonna say before you say it, think hard and if you can't say "that's the illest shit i've heard then think more on it.

keep doin what you're doin and get better

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shut the fuck up

even if i stutter i'll still sh-sh-shit on you/ pun

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little did we know that we riddle
some middle man who didn't do ditally/ pun

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Old 04-10-03, 03:49 PM   #5
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ight thanks guys...i startedbout 4 days ago..still workin on it yo...check out my other ones, they arent as bad
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