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10-24-03, 10:22 PM | #1 | ||||||
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The Monkey Dream
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Nothing spectacular...jus a thought on the way home from work today I figured i'd make into a quick peice.....I think its a funny idea....jus dunno if I capitalized on it to well.....feedback please...
THE MONKEY DREAM if I was a African Mon-Key... I'd Infect the civilized wit HIV... Analy...Thru Rus-ty I.V's.... only..If... i was a Diseased MonKey..... Oh hey! its Carson Daily...wanna Rip on me?... Heres sum HIV...I'll even Deliver..Shippin Free Cus im the Mon-Key Makin Funky Diseases for no reason... forget the teasin, I contract plagues like AIDs fer per-s-nal pleasin/ cus... if I was a African Mon-Key... I'd Infect the civilized wit HIV... Analy...Thru Rus-ty I.V's.... only..If... i was a Diseased MonKey..... Cure for AIDs?...hey then! Theres always room fer Anthrax- I'll sell em in Dime Sacks to doped up Addicts... I love dese lethal tactics... Hittin harder than head-shots by Tommy Maddux.. Terrorist play wit simply Chemistry an math-e-matics... Who ever said school was jus fer nerds...an geeks.. Where else can learn to infect the world in 4-5 weeks.. oh if only.... I was a African Mon-Key... I'd Infect the civilized wit HIV... Analy...Thru Rus-ty I.V's.... only..If... i was a Diseased MonKey..... |
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10-24-03, 10:25 PM | #2 | |||||||
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LOL...
Kind of a weak pievce... Missing vocab and emotion... But decent for something so short... Try writing on something real ya know... Good fuck-around piece though Peep: Betrayed by Faith |
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10-24-03, 10:26 PM | #3 | ||||||
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^^figured as much...like i said....thought it be a funny subject...Iwill check that out right now...thanks fer feedback
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10-24-03, 10:37 PM | #4 | ||||||
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kinda strange piece
had little depth to it but its good to experiment with topics n shit so props for that not gonna say what was missing cos u obviously didnt try but interesting to see the strange way your mind works heh heh peep mine if u will..been slept on |
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10-24-03, 10:44 PM | #5 | ||||||
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no doubt...thanks fer feedback...
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10-25-03, 11:43 AM | #6 | ||||||
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IP: F03F CA7D
yo thats awesome, this song big time reminded me of a couple eminem songs, like my name is or something, cause your just talkin bout cracked out shit.
Who ever said school was jus fer nerds...an geeks.. Where else can learn to infect the world in 4-5 weeks ^^^^ This bar was the best part. the other guys talkin bout emotion and vocab? i know your not trying spit an ill verse here, its just a quick drop on a very original topic. thatd be a good kinda song to have on CD, i think it would be the kind of song that goes on the radio... or maybe not. anyways i liked it, keep droppin. peace |
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10-25-03, 11:53 AM | #7 | ||||||
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I don't know....this can be taken the wrong way....
African monkeys with AID's......more than likely will offend black people....since that is 3 stereotypes combined..... Anyways, I didn't really like the piece all that much...... |
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10-25-03, 11:55 AM | #8 | ||||||
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^^^^^^^^this guy smokin crack? lmao.
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10-25-03, 11:55 AM | #9 | ||||||
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^^way too much thought into it......but thanks fer feedback....
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10-25-03, 02:17 PM | #10 | |||||||
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thought this was a pretty weak drop, i think the HIV lines have been played enough it just seems borin......but peace!
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10-25-03, 02:38 PM | #11 | ||||||
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this was not funny in the slightest-the only thing you could claim about this piece was uniqueness i guess, i dunno how old r u?12 13 then its kinda funny....maybe a music vid wud be funny for it otherwise i dont like this
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10-25-03, 07:41 PM | #12 | ||||||
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people are to intouch with feelings these days.........
im 19....i was bored....and i thought it was funny....... oh's well....thanks for feedback..... i think people were lookin for something deep here...lolz... |
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10-25-03, 08:05 PM | #13 | |||||
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uh that was a kind of weird topic................but it was funny as heck. you had some nice wordplay in the flow and it flowed well.
nice drop playa holla |
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10-26-03, 11:12 PM | #14 | ||||||
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hey its The Monkey Dream.....time for more critiks to hit it...pc*1*
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10-27-03, 03:41 AM | #15 | ||||||
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odd work twin funny humor but abstract as fuck you was really bored.
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