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11-08-05, 07:15 PM | #1 | |||||||
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We Pay 2 Betray
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Ubiquity within a flick
Of a ubiquitous heart That never ceases to exist A love withdrawn forced to reminisce Traveling through a timeless script From rose to hip And skies to ruins In oceans of imagination Continuous depths with no limitation Moving Inwardly extruding A realm of divulging dedication To the totality of time Mirroring the wrist of Jah’s benevolence Echoing destined shouts of beauty So strange that sacredly immense Startled but not yet completed Glory alone to shy to feed it Touring the epitome of ubiquity Without enough dreams to spare Any life that would have been cheated Some scary existence plucked of sadness Unveiling the faces of joy Souring all the madness Over the cities that are changing Rearranging the evening stare Giving way for the acclaiming Tandem treachery we pay to betray
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11-16-05, 03:45 PM | #2 | ||||
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Dunno why this hasn't gotten any feed yet actually...
Feeling the concept and the way you worked it out was so interesting and captivating. The images you were using suited the piece and the overall vibe of the poem. You had a good balance in your vocab. Keep it up!
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