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08-12-05, 11:14 PM | #1 | ||||||
HAHAHAHAH!..i onno
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My Life Vol.1
IP: 1D2D 3134
This is spoken word, not ment to rhyme....not really ment to mean anything..just my life is totally fucked..dont really even make sense after i read it twice but it is my thoughts at the moment..please read and leave feedback..
My Life is filled with misjudgement i have hate, love, and no judgement I have a peice of me missing and i cant seem to find it my heart and courage is lost i'm the only one who losses the cost most unpleasure, come from within as demons stare me with pleasure my long road is unable to be measured cost is a cost to be bought i'd rather stop what i'm doin and rot rather within or not i kno i'm just here to please him and he isnt liking what i am doing, my fucking life is fucked mentally, phisically, all of the above nothing is nice, nothing is good i wish i would die, but i'm not in the mood nothing can bring me out of this down nothing ever will so i'm just here to be a be and nothing more to he total worthlessness of my life i need to spot my split decisions approve on my decisions leave my self for my mental thoughts, this is bull shit i dont even get what i writing that maybe because i'm doing this hiding from my self, this is my life volume one and i live and die by the gun
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08-17-05, 09:34 PM | #2 | |||||
<<-Carpe Noctum->>
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IP: 3240 794D
This was pretty good for the kind of piece it was, showed strong emotion in this as well, like the vocabulary, descriptive..i think some lines could have been extended a little bit, not bad at all, keep dropping.1
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