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Old 08-12-05, 11:14 PM   #1
Lay-z
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My Life Vol.1

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This is spoken word, not ment to rhyme....not really ment to mean anything..just my life is totally fucked..dont really even make sense after i read it twice but it is my thoughts at the moment..please read and leave feedback..

My Life is filled with misjudgement
i have hate, love, and no judgement
I have a peice of me missing
and i cant seem to find it
my heart and courage is lost
i'm the only one who losses the cost
most unpleasure, come from within
as demons stare me with pleasure
my long road is unable to be measured
cost is a cost to be bought
i'd rather stop what i'm doin and rot
rather within or not
i kno i'm just here to please him
and he isnt liking what i am doing,
my fucking life is fucked
mentally, phisically, all of the above
nothing is nice, nothing is good
i wish i would die, but i'm not in the mood
nothing can bring me out of this down
nothing ever will
so i'm just here to be a be and nothing more to he
total worthlessness of my life
i need to spot my split decisions
approve on my decisions
leave my self for my mental thoughts,
this is bull shit i dont even get what i writing
that maybe because i'm doing this hiding
from my self, this is my life volume one
and i live and die by the gun
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Old 08-17-05, 09:34 PM   #2
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This was pretty good for the kind of piece it was, showed strong emotion in this as well, like the vocabulary, descriptive..i think some lines could have been extended a little bit, not bad at all, keep dropping.1
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