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Old 04-11-06, 08:51 AM   #1
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Artikulate ft. Jay - Scary Movie '06

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Old 04-11-06, 10:15 AM   #2
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Ight, beat comes in, i thought at first it wasnt the right choice, but after a bit, it grew on my quickly.

Ight first up.....i'm guessin its you Art....

Your flow was slightly off in your first, but you recovered on the next line. Great wordplay with the theme, R L stein - goosebumps, lol @ the candy man lookin like willy wonka. The best one was the freddy kruger one. Improve on your flow, and add more emotion which will emphasize more on what you say. The laid back feeling fitted with the beat, but not with what you say.

Second guy......Jay i guess...

comes in with nice wordplay, good introduction. Great metaphors, great imagery. Nothing really wrong wit this verse. Maybe a taid bit more emotion if anything. But still good shit.

Overall, tight track, wish it wasnt as short as it was. Definitly downloadable.

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Old 04-11-06, 10:10 PM   #3
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Old 04-12-06, 01:41 AM   #4
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First one- Flow is eh. Haha willy wonka was dope. Meh, the delivery and emotion could be a little better, not bad though.

Second- Nothing that special here, flow is kinda choppy. You don't sound like you believe what you are saying.

Not bad, I liked the first dude better. Wordplay was funny and creative. Good job.
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Old 04-12-06, 03:14 AM   #5
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yea it got messed in with mixing...makes my timing seem off. so it sounds really choppy....i gotta see if i can fix that
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Old 04-12-06, 07:40 AM   #6
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aight thanks for the feed uppin
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