I sunk, down farther and deeper than any other
How could I of done that? He was like a brother..
A complete chaos of a man, temper was elapsed
He was a demolished being, from the soul he collapsed
Fucking tortured his very essence, a man weeping
When seen accurately, is not something pleasing
And than there was one, who did what others would not…
Who could’ve destroyed something as burly as gods very rock..


All because of several words exchanged, simple joke’s…
How was I to know, that words could be equal to low blows…
But I did and I believed the words with no conscious what so ever
I tore at him, ripped him apart from the inside out, something I never
Thought I ever could do to him, a best friend, he was family
It didn’t matter though, I lashed at him, destroyed mentally
No chance to reverse my words that had killed a man’s spirit
A man with no soul, is not a man, but a body without a purpose


He is now a broken being, a man who is leaving
There is no one he is meeting, as he was believing
In something that never existed, I laughed in his presence
Should of listened, but I wonder………if he’s missed
A son lost, a daughter forgotten, a whole family dispersed
How much did it cost, something was wrong, a family and 3 hearses?
Even by death they couldn’t unite, to be just be one
For that is what they tried to fight, now they are done
All because of what I started what I said….
Am I that fucked up….because it hasn’t happened…..
These are just thoughts inside my head….


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Believe me, you dont' want to know what sparked this in my head......


http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2016677
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...t=180675&page=2

dope shit pretty decent vocab good flow overall i like dit...=1=

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yeah, i liked the twist you had there, some parts that didnt flow...but that didnt matter because i was hooked the whole time....images were popping outta nowhere, haha, vocab was what took the cake, very nice, portrayed your topic nicely and really brought out the core of your verse....thats some crazy shit though, but a different turn on the usually 'diss' or 'i hate life' open mics....nice drop man, keep up

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^thanks for the feedback.

shit was tight...flow was cool, structure was cool...it was cool lol i like this...8/10...RTF at any or all of the below in my sig....

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Thanks for the feedback, appreciate it all. Links have been hit up.

i aint really follow it could be from my lack of attention but it really didnt grab me and make me want to finish readin it. i did tho and of course u had some nice lines in there and i can tell u got talent i jus wanna read some more of ya stuff this one wasnt bad at all i jus didnt get into it.so keep doin wat u do! ~respect

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^fair enough, some topics arn't for some people, maybe it was my delivery, don't be afraid to nominate people Really though, thanks for the feedback and LEAVE LINKS, that way I can return the favour.

upppppppppping this please leave feedback.......................!

Come On Come On Come On Come On Come On.

Shit was nice I liked the flow perfect structure nice vocab the word play was nice it was a good drop I think you could of came harder just a lil bit but it was decent 7/10

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btw repay the favor 2 links in sig!

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