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A White Nightmare
IP: 40E9 F947
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Last Poet Southsideloco Word Perfect Anotha day, sunshine reflects da horizon with its uv ray/ While we go about our priorities trying to get payed/ Livin this life like a blind date, clueless actions are portrayed/ lost souls infected with dat industrial virus, alcohol & narcotics/ I smell something fishy and it aint ya sistas pussy/ Its this life re-running like i love lucy, people accusin & abusing/ Their will and their lifestyle, judging your profile and attire/ Thats why honesty does not exist cuz everyone is a sinna & liar/ Mankind will be the destruction as we burn in a ring of fire/ Money, Greed and desire create murder fo hire/ Kidnappings are beggining to get higher straits for a dyer/ Tellin you dat evil men lurk in the shadows in different colors/ Fear of anotha mans cultural backround, da news makes it sound/ But i notice a fact comin from my perspective keepin track around/ How many mass murderers kill people in cities and little towns/ Da answer aint black or brown, its more white dan paint on clown/ Reached the end of my thesis, yall don't like it, it my recess pieces/ |
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IP: B910 8CBB
...Hmm...not bad...I felt as you didn't stay on the topic through the whole thing...but...not bad...keep up...^^
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IP: 438E 522F
i tht that was aight
i cud rlate ta u lyrics n u rymes were gud keep it goin rturn faver>>>http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=99921 sfe peace out Last edited by |>SWIFTWAKYA<| : 12-19-03 at 02:12 PM. |
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IP: 399E F0FD
It was interesting. I think the elevation was a little off. Topic was aight. I think you could've done better on that. Nice ending. I see so much shit where people is weak in ending. Pretty cool shit.
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IP: 19AF 50C1
steered a little of track but all the elements were there i think you can do better but this isnt a bad piece by any means
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IP: 9C1E 2B43
Yeah this was alright i thought....you are improving from your last couple pieces i saw from you....structure in this was pretty good....your vocab was good as well...flow in this was off at parts i thought but nothing real bad....but overall this was alright...keep at it.
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IP: 40E9 F947
thank you guys, all of you. I know in the past i hadnt replied dat much, but now dat i have realized the help of your words, i understand how much everyones work matters. thank you.
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