Check it, P.I.C.'s first track,
Young but wise, but ready for the challenge.....please comment on this first track

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/6/fucksoeur3music.htm

those are the lyrics.....enjoy
what can i do
You blow your shit on me coz you know I got the way
The flow to match the beat I got from doctor DRE
You can’t repose coz your nighmares won’t be okay
You won’t awaken and percieve the dawn of day
IT’s like saying in a black bar, I’m from the KKK
They responded with hate, a gun to your head, no time to pray
Got on your knees, glued your hands, looked at the sky so gray
Asked to god fo this to go away
Expect me not to diss and everthing to be okay
You pissed me off, now it’s time fo me to portray
The real image behind the great mask of hate
Drop my bombs fo you to hit the massive grave
Blow you up like Sadam’s statue made of clay
Memories of me like the one of BAGDAD here to stay
Gonna settle up my regime and you better obey
Or execution with lead in your cranium shall the bullet lay

White bandana with a celtic cap backwards
Rewind me back coz I’m going more towards
The sky, so high, I lie, I try
this one way fame, is enough to make you die
that’s when all enemies collide
What can I do
To kill your troop
To Tell the motherfuckin truth

If you talk the talk you gotta walk the walk
Now lock your locks and watch the clock
While I top the block, 180 second clock
Is that enough for me, to clutch the shot
You think that hiphop is only about wearing a jersey
To drink smirnov talkin about your hommy in jersey
being in this rap game, you don’t know what you got into
Friends backstabbing you, got no clue who’s with you
Trust and biblical faith is not somethin to play with
One day you make a handshake, next day greeted with a fist
Jealousy is what you take, then my ass you can kiss
Cuz from this day on, I’m livin to do this
The gladiator Maximus, the roman general that commands all my lines
Send soldiers to bring you down from crimson skies
next time my next rimes might be about you

i dont know the rules here..but you usualy have to make a few replies before you post..the same rule applies..because most rappers wont reply to your shit if you dont reply to theirs..get it?..

also..if there is a reply minimum..they will close your thread..for not making replies before you post..and then you wont be able to get any replies to your shit..

just some advice..

pZ..

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umm....huh??? ok, first, are you canadian or somethin cuz your words were all slurred soundin, second whats with the tryin to use a deep voice for the end of the chorus there....and third, your flow was very poorly put together and didnt even go to the beat.......

lmao...... ur voice is funny as fuck and ur off alot main .. turns track off
keep elevatin though

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Ok thanks men but how about my shit is it good

it seems like this is your first song, just keep on making music untill you find that song that your like daaaamn this is dope. you will get there just enjoy your emotions and your mic..........have fun with it.....good for first track, your voice sounds like you would battle alot.........
peace

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SOFT FOCUS

[The Buddah just sits and smiles]

thxs for the support men....really helps mentaly, I gave a lot of time and effort to get this shit right thxs

peace

for your first track it's pretty nice... u got nice emotion... you're off beat a little.. lol.. only 'bout wearin' a jersey.. but u said white bandana.. so is that what hip-hops all about... i dno, it was good 4 a first time..

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Voice Is Fuckin' Funny As Shit .... Flow Was Horrible .... Delivery/Presence Was Not There At All ... U Were Stretchin' Ya Words Madly ... Lyrics Were Whack To Me ... Ya Multies Were Ehh Decent At Times .... But U Were Inconsistent Thru Out The Track ...

Not Feelin' This At All ....

-Nuff Said .... ~ Uno ~

replyin the favour,

ya voice is nice, but ya flow was kinda ehhhhhh. you seem like ya missin 1 or 2 syallables in every bar, and ya kinda stretch ya words. nice quality, good emotion, juss work on ya flow, that was ya main flaw.