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I simply ain't nuthin to mess with, RAYMAN G be the name
Get this straight in ya brain, I'm ahead of the game Guess you heard of my fame, I'm drivin ladies insane Now I'm at it again guess yawl tired of the pain Want the end of my reign but I'ma reign some mo Bring pain to every foe yawl prepare to fall While my whole crew ball, lyrically boostin the death toll And we movin every ho straight across the dancefloor I'm grabbin 3 or maybe 4, shine brighter than a supernova The black Casanova grab the mic and it's over! I'm an auto you a revolver, a Hummer you a Rover It ain't over til you sober til I come with the solver ![]() |
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IP: 9B91 D0C6
I THINK I TRIED
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IP: 19AF 50C1
YOU GOT GREAT WORDPLAY BUT THIOS FELL VERY SIMPLE NOTHING REALLY ASTONISHING.......YOU HAD NO REAL CLIMAX POINT....SO IN THE END FELL LIKE SOME RANDOM RABLINGS...YOUR WORDPLAY IS HOT BUT EVERYTHING ELSE DOES NEED WORK.STAY UP
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IP: 9C1E 2B43
You need to leave 3 links or 3 names of people you left feedback to or this will get closed. Thanks.
But yeah this was ok.....your structure was alright, could be a bit better i thought though....you had some good wordplay like Word said....flow in this was ok, it fell off at points though....but keep at it. |
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IP: 2B63 E9DE
thank you people
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IP: C005 0B5C
The wordplay in this was not good.. It was terriby wack.. I would have called you the biggestherb ever if it wasn't for that Casanova line.. The flow was okay,, but waaaaaaaayy to basic to kick it over a beat.. Elevate and Stay Up
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IP: 2614 26EA
it was iight your wordplay i thougt was too basic
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IP: 2B63 E9DE
maybe i tried
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IP: 9C1E 2B43
I warned you about the links, but you post back twice without links so this is Closed...Get Links Next Time.
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