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i take explicit and illicit a little from both and split it
im a bad habit but you just cant kick it, im a cross between evil and wicked to get in my mind gimme your ticket your first ride is free the next one will cost im pickin up the extra skills that you lost im like god i put the hollocaust on pause retract your claws i aint lookin for beef battle your beliefs dont come lookin for me unless of course you blind and can't see then you wont see my fist comin for your teeth im hummin on your beats and overlay em with grace my rhymes are mid-evil like mayhem with a mace im gone without a trace and leavin no one alive im givin up the chase and there's nowhere to hide i strive to be the best that i can be and my lyrical arsenal comes in handy with shit so sweet it passes for candy i freshen up with splashes of brandy so get to know me before you brand me. ![]() ![]() ![]() Last edited by Deluxxe : 01-29-04 at 12:21 PM. |
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nice.
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IP: 5043 32F4
some one respond... i like feedback!
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Eddy.
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IP: 77D5 6AAD
Content is blah, .. it rhymed, .. but nothing special, elevate..use better metta's, up ur vocab, .. i mean this was kinda useless.. i mean :
''your first ride is free the next one will cost im pickin up the extra skills that you lost'' as audio it maybe sound good, .. but still i didnt feel the content, an as an open mic this was simplistic & un enjoyable =) Have a nice day..
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IP: 5043 32F4
thanx for reading......and the feed-back, ill see what i can do. :}-~
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IP: 5043 32F4
everyone sleeps....don't! i need feedback..heh
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Word.
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IP: 340D 8B8F
This was ok.....structure seemed fine....the content i didnt really like that much though....try adding some more multies to this to make it better and more complex....some better metas as well....but overall this was ok....just keep at it.
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IP: 01F8 C64F
This has got potential bit simple at the moment the sentences rhyme but they dont like go together theres jus no connection like they're jus stuck together. "your first ride is free the next one will cost
im pickin up the extra skills that you lost" Dont see the conection but its a start an with a little work could be improved.
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IP: 5043 32F4
thx... any more??
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"The Eleete"
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IP: FAD9 BD2A
This pretty good if your just startin out man....dont pay attentin to what haters tell you keep writing stay focus an slip into the music.....itll come clearer so keep doing doing your thing....elevate yourself...peace
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IP: 5043 32F4
thx. eleete!! i appreciate it.
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Flyweight
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IP: 5043 32F4
test.
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Flyweight
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IP: 6301 79A8
Yea twas good for a first timer just check out the freestylin guides at the wackness emergency center and elevate based on those guidlines, i can see the potential in you haha
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