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05-25-03, 12:38 AM | #1 | ||||||
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IP: 7EF9 FAD9
this is my verse to a song...its not finished yet cause i'm not sure i wanna do it. its pretty much about me usin rappin as a way out of stress and shit like that...anyway, tell me what you think
see i, struggled with hard shit and scuffled with hardships but through out that my character remains untarnished i'm flawless, but nowhere close to bein perfect see you might be uncertain from the words i've exerted but my slurs are inverted, contridiction at its finest see i'm worn down from the friction of mankind and depicted by the blindness, unsure of what lies ahead my eyes is red, late night i lie in my bed on and off ponderin thoughts of the cost on what it would take to unravels lifes knots alongside with other miscellanious subjects i leave myself subject to other peoples judgements open to the public, hopin that they love it thats all i got so far...tell me what you think |
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05-25-03, 12:48 AM | #2 | ||||||
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nice one here, seems like u comin with sum deep stuff here,
i love it keep doing what u do |
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05-25-03, 12:52 AM | #3 | ||||||
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i love you too dark. i mean.....yea i love you too and thanks for the feedback and man we need to do our collabo
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05-25-03, 01:00 AM | #4 | ||||||
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damn im sorry, sumthin wrong with my aim imma hit u up lata
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05-25-03, 01:09 AM | #5 | ||||||
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IP: 5063 2F37
depicted by the blindness, unsure of what lies ahead
my eyes is red, late night i lie in my bed on and off ponderin thoughts of the cost on what it would take to unravels lifes knots alongside with other miscellanious subjects i leave myself subject to other peoples judgements that was tite..liked that alot |
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05-25-03, 01:35 AM | #6 | ||||||
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IP: 7EF9 FAD9
thank you...still uppin this
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05-25-03, 01:58 AM | #7 | |||||||
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IP: FF98 53B8
Short but Ill..........I cant wait till u drop da whole shit
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05-25-03, 11:14 PM | #8 | ||||||
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upppin
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05-25-03, 11:18 PM | #9 | ||||||
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IP: F5AB 8B55
yeah that was mad yo, all these other rappers that want replies i usually just battle em and make them look like dickheads but thats some good shit. its the way i rap, i try to grab the words from as deep down of my heart as i can, good shit bro
you can do it |
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05-25-03, 11:20 PM | #10 | ||||||
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lies ahead
lie in my bed change the second part to lie in bed, it rhyms better wit lies ahead |
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05-25-03, 11:27 PM | #11 | ||||||
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hey thanks for the advice man....nice
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05-25-03, 11:30 PM | #12 | ||||||
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IP: 5C5E CC78
Or maybe:
I'm lying in my bed Thinkin of what lies ahead I don't know. Jus tryin to help out. but other than that, that shit was mean, and deep. Keep up the good work dawg. |
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05-26-03, 01:42 AM | #13 | ||||||
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thanks for the advice guys...i'll take it into consideration
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05-26-03, 12:28 PM | #14 | ||||||
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uppin
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05-26-03, 06:03 PM | #15 | ||||||
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this is good, like i said b'fore,
keep doing ya thang boo -Tory |
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