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05-17-05, 11:32 AM
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...inspires fear.
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Imagination run wild`.
IP: 508E 2DA7
Within my mind i was found, basking in the ambience of trouble.
Accompanied by once tall ideas, now left horizontal in a batch of rubble. I can't go through this again, i don't have the strength to lift the pen. Or reside away from family and friends, from feelings i need to guard and fend. A motive is what i crave, to whisk away these lonely days, pondering & sitting. Unleashed emotions make the pen a slave, inscribing the many tales i've been wishing. Thoughts so loud when i was younger, i started to live in my own mind. Grew farther away from close ones like my brother, social skills began to grind. Running through my imagination, anything is possible. To me. Incoming dreams and nightmares blend, they seem to delve in reality. Writing what i've felt and thought for years, until ink ammo runs dry. Another form to see my dimension, i aborted reality gradually, and died. Imagination was my afterlife, experiences re-run in this scene of tales. Because i only used it when life took a turn for the worst, and when all else failed. Feed. |
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05-17-05, 08:16 PM
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: 8A1A D0A3
very nice
vocab was pretty good too overall good |
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05-17-05, 08:31 PM
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Light Weight
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IP: 2AE1 E675
dont you like, need to drop a link?
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05-18-05, 12:43 PM
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...inspires fear.
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IP: A544 C9AB
^ Yeah, i'll get right on that.
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05-18-05, 04:04 PM
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Poet's Daughter.
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IP: 4208 F86D
Flowed nicly. The imagination was good, needs to be more complex. The emtion was nice also. I suggest you use more & decent vocab. Meta'z are needed. Similies are needed also. But overall, nice piece.
I appreciate if you do the same for me (leaving a feedback) on my om http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=191237 ^^ There's the link to my new OM please, leave feed.
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