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06-07-03, 03:46 AM | #1 | |||||||
I Am The Light
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round 2 Eviley vs varentao
IP: 7A1B BD41
Alright--same rules 10 min 20 max---
Due.. Wed....... Topic.....A clock...a bed--a window--"a human"............Time----- Good luck with this one---please use some sort of symbolism for each word i used.....the main factors should be the things above -1-
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06-07-03, 04:43 AM | #2 | ||||||
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i'm in.............quite difficult but i will thinkof something
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06-07-03, 09:54 PM | #3 | ||||||
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IP: D342 2A1B
er...yeah, sounds 'interesting'..(!)....
Just gonna say Deacon, i'm gonna be busy for a while...so is there any chance you could extend the deadline. Like till the end of next saturday. Cos then i'll have a day to properly do it. You know, do a couple of quick drafts on a weekday (10 mins on weekdays, and only 2 days free for that too..)...and then a day to just do it up properly. |
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06-08-03, 03:47 AM | #4 | |||||||
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alright deadlines are changed for sat..
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SOFT FOCUS crew record (3-0) Wits end ~ DOI ~ Central....now who's next? sacred scriptures record (5-0) |
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06-08-03, 06:59 PM | #5 | ||||||
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aight cool
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06-08-03, 09:22 PM | #6 | |||||||
Tampons are expensive
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IP: EF0A E7B2
very good topic....
this is when both should came strong...this kind of topic would make a very good masterpiece.... ill be round here waitin to read ur poems... u can do it guys! good luck!
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<br><br><center>- Shiznit - - Tampons are still expensive - - That's a Fact - </center> |
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06-08-03, 09:36 PM | #7 | |||
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IP: 9718 7C2A
could i ask why mine and
tik's competition is closed... let me know...consider this the check in...
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06-08-03, 10:16 PM | #8 | ||||||
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IP: D342 2A1B
^^Tis now open, Sand...
And Shiznit, with it being so no specific, it makes it both harder ad easier... ...and thanks for the added pressure...(!).. ..well i guess i should start now. But, er...i'll stick to me tournament thing of doing it on my way home late at night...er..yeah.. |
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06-09-03, 06:12 PM | #9 | ||||||
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IP: 6130 9069
i am ready to post........whenever you are Verentao
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06-09-03, 07:49 PM | #10 | ||||||
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IP: D342 2A1B
What the frig?! I've just started tonight, for like 30mins, and i only done my first stanza, which io probably wont keep!!..
Be patient, got till end of Saturday.. |
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06-10-03, 01:16 AM | #11 | ||||||
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i know just let me know i get anxious that's all
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06-10-03, 08:14 AM | #12 | ||||||
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IP: D342 2A1B
Heh, no problem...i'll probably leave finish it in the last minutes of Saturday...but yeah, i'll post first...i'll hit you up on PM if you want...to tell you i posted...
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06-10-03, 08:39 PM | #13 | ||||||
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aight cool
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06-11-03, 10:35 PM | #14 | ||||||
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IP: D342 2A1B
I would say it's an unusual thing, but it aint. I was working on another piece, when all of a sudden, this one just came out...
...so THIS piece i will drop now. And if/when i complete the other piece, i will decide whether i want to keep this piece up, or put up the other piece. But as said, this jsur came out. And i felt it so damn suitable...well it's late, so i'm off in a bit... here it is..(sorry for the crypticism, but then again, that's just the way it is...er...nearly always..!!.).. PIECE DELETED FOR ORIGINAL ONE -------------------------------- Okay, so completed the one i was working on originally. Now i've always said that no piece i write (apart from two before THE 'tragedy' and 'blockage'...) is complete, and probably will never be. Certainly is th case with this one. I mean it's complete in many contexts, but in the sense of the writer, would probably ammend bits here and there in the months, years to come..anyway, just thought i'd say that... Here it is.. Upon a cold moist sill of rotting wood I lay to rest my bare sleeping arms All hot from hellish dreams of inner malign Blanket lies motionless on hard carpet floor Through this battered window i wearily gaze Searching for sweet light amid the glaring pain To drive’s edge walks this person well dressed Where sits lonely tramp coughing into his booze So insane this rage that becomes centre stage From mere being it erupted in violent bursts With every tick a kick to the sound of tock Bottle broken as blood pours slowly draining.. Neither man nor woman but ghastly beast To let wreak such darkness upon poor souls Yet blind behind the web of deception we bind Too much i know that i cannot quite touch Time slowly fades as i lay here wasting Truth comes ever clearer as cracks appear Whispers resound asking of these dark visions I cry the horror, the humanity, the HUMAN... Last edited by varentao : 06-14-03 at 08:32 PM. |
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06-12-03, 03:03 AM | #15 | ||||||
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IP: 7E65 0A49
nice very nice....here is mine....
eternity in heaven a soul less human nothing but a stone i lay here my windows not blinking they just stare at the light of christ and air slowly feel life releaseing and heartbeat ceaseing not caring is increaseing my eyes are tired but my mind enrages i stare at the clock that never changes i lay here lifeless on my eternal bed i call my coffin time happens around me but i rest here and watch them i feel trapped not able to leave i was in a church not able to breath i feel my soul release and everyone around me is crying i scream i am alive i'm not dieing i did not leave the world of the living trying to wipe the tears off my mothers face but i go right through her like it was nothing but open space i thought i was alive but that was not the case i was shot and killed buried on the third day i walk into the light and i see heavens doors of eternity for i am gone from all loves humanity at first i thought it was insanity but i am gone from this world gone from my family i may be gone in presence but i havent left life cause i watch you from the clouds and stars for all of time cause i remain in memory and your in mine... |
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