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05-23-05, 12:18 AM
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White Flag
IP: 6BC9 4CDE
White Flag Why it all happened.. An 23 year old man, disputed with an intersecting Life Not any perfection, only graceful children and his Wife.. So frustrated, just because he wanted to earn Metals He’d always love to attack terrorists posing as Rebels.. Finding ways to feed his family, he had gripped Reality Life’s fatality, strong as it was, he proved his Mentality.. Killing was his profession, entering war was his Confession The more he killed, his future would fill with Depression.. The phone call.. Spending quality time with his family, he got a serious Call His wife yelling in sacrifice, wasn’t enough to prove he’d Fall His children crying, bagging for him to stay, to keep his Place Looking at pictures to see his face, almost as bad as a Disgrace He tried calming them down, still he was hurting to be Heroic There was no possible way of stopping his feelings to Chock it All he wanted to do was shoot fates reality, for his Obsession Thinking he’d be on an world mission, only so filled of Tension Getting back at camp.. He realized, he just couldn’t idealize, it was all so Furious Only so curious, he chose to go on but it got way to Imperious In command of his own platoon, a lot just didn’t Understand Why he was so fierce, he’d just patronize minds in the Land And in hand he had the rankest weapons of mad Destruction But he craved, only to go in battle and build on his Function Forced to play the games of warfare, he was known as a Shame Thinking he’ll earn and find ways, but he only felt gashing Pain Trying to earn some fame, only he’d ponder about being Home He thought he had a clone, strictly stuck just suffering Alone But he was dedicated to war, fate couldn’t detected his Infection He tried to draw himself an exact picture of his own Perfection Eventually he lost his platoon cause of a Vietnam Flamethrower In the back of his mind, he thought he turned into a Poser Looking for a better life, inspired by warfare, wanting to Retire The supposed man in command, only exposed by internal Fire Why it all happened.. An 23 year old man, disputed with an intersecting Life Not any perfection, only graceful children and his Wife.. So frustrated, just because he wanted to earn Metals He’d always love to attack terrorists posing as Rebels.. Finding ways to feed his family, he had gripped Reality Life’s fatality, strong as it was, he proved his Mentality.. Killing was his profession, entering war was his Confession The more he killed, his future would fill with Depression.. Dramatically losing.. Back at his home base, they were getting shot Viciously But imperiously he wasn’t sure, life was getting Seriously His life and others were on line, trying to withdraw in Time So noisy you couldn’t hear the drop of the loudest Dime One of the worlds hugest crimes, with only little to Prove But they had no choice it was to fierce, they had to Lose And with one glance of shock, they weren’t gonna Retreat At least not yet, having never to experiencing a hard Defeat Getting seriously damaged.. They pushed forward, forcing an last existence of Resistance Though the base got demolished, they needed no Assistance No persistence, only needing aircrafts to drop atomic Bombs Stuck in Vietnam, the creaks leaking in all the soldiers Palms Only wanting to create screams, the children couldn’t Survive Medics having drives to revive, wanting everyone to stay Alive Purposely thinking curiously , trying to force the saddest Ending That’s what the Americans were Intending, never Pretending They’d show intensions, perfect answers for lethal Inventions But the Vietnam soldiers fought back, with stronger Tensions.. Of power so they got back at the Americans, it all fell Apart All he could prove was heart, only having to start to act Smart He got tempted and full of frustration, with no sign of Perfection No chances of interception, they had to retreat all Intensions They waved the white flag, leaving all the dead behind Fate The tragedy finished, only broken hearts trying to reach the Gate Why it all happened.. An 23 year old man, disputed with an intersecting Life Not any perfection, only graceful children and his Wife.. So frustrated, just because he wanted to earn Metals He’d always love to attack terrorists posing as Rebels.. Finding ways to feed his family, he had gripped Reality Life’s fatality, strong as it was, he proved his Mentality.. Killing was his profession, entering war was his Confession The more he killed, his future would fill with Depression..
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05-23-05, 12:18 AM
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IP: 6BC9 4CDE
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05-26-05, 11:43 PM
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IP: 6BC9 4CDE
come on uppin...
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05-27-05, 12:16 AM
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Gave you feed in rb, nice shyt
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05-29-05, 02:06 AM
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The Paragraph President
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IP: 6BC9 4CDE
thanks uppin...
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05-30-05, 01:41 AM
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The Paragraph President
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IP: 6BC9 4CDE
uppin..........
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06-01-05, 02:33 PM
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The Paragraph President
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IP: 6BC9 4CDE
uppin................
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06-01-05, 03:50 PM
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SEE YA AT THE TOP
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IP: 1EDC 673C
uppin man you suck.....
be a battler quit with this pussy ass stories............... oh yeah you suck
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06-12-05, 11:34 PM
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The Paragraph President
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IP: 6BC9 4CDE
i do battle im like 15-1 in topical battles. in a row i usto have 12 wins tell i lost to tim on rb i'd merk you do bad ive elevated so much
anyway uppin.
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06-16-05, 11:16 PM
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The Paragraph President
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IP: 6BC9 4CDE
uppin..........
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07-09-05, 11:08 AM
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IP: 2372 BC06
oreo is wack
uppin
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07-09-05, 05:59 PM
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The Rise
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this was a ok drop from you.....vocab was put and used nicely didnt say words that are used in daily life....flow was goin well kept me readin on rythem.....structure was good...opener was a good intro and closer was not that good....in my oponion i think this was to long but it was overall pretty good...
overall-7/10 |
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07-09-05, 07:27 PM
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Just searching.
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IP: D7AC CF0D
Heh. Different than on RB, huh? Especially when you get an OM nomination then Jekyll tells us all how the same thing was dropped half a year ago.
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07-09-05, 10:23 PM
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Soon to be legendary
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IP: 5545 EF20
dude GIVE UP !!!!!
ITS OVER 3 MONTHS OLD !!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ROAR. anywho. i didnt like it, very simplistic, and it didnt have any originality.....I think you need creativity as well, your writings are very boring mang, just keep trying and hopefully youll elevate nicely....................But stop Upping this thread you hoe cake Jeez |
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07-24-05, 05:39 PM
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The Paragraph President
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IP: 2372 BC06
uppin what are you gonna do about it, i'd like to get better n better feed of ways to get bigger even if this is like 3 monthes old
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