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01-31-04, 03:07 AM | #1 | |||||||
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Me against I...[Keystyle]
IP: 9588 E886
Well...I'm working on a track...and I jsut started writing and this came to my head...I think it's pretty dope, going to be an audio. It's me against myself...1 and 2 just stand for the two parts of me.
1- First i'll watch him leave his crib, then walk the street Watch him walk past, then my clip he'll meet 2- I can see all his moves, predict where he'll land Only chance I got to live is to devise a counter-plan 1- Which weapon for assault? I can use the quick snipe or make him suffer and feel the slit of the knife 2- I know he's equipped, has everything that he needs But so do I possess what is required to succeed 1- I know just how he thinks, where he'll start and stop If he'll run, or take cover, or fight back and take shots 2- I see what he see's, and My time is his time His death is my death, my mind is his mind 1- Hidden by the dark of night, have target in sight Leaning over top of the roof, ready to strike 2- Leaving where I am, I can feel where he is That's why once I step outside...I decide to do this 1- He disappears, only took one second to blink can't lose focus on my mission, it allows him to think 2- I've regained control, and now to put it to work I assemble my weapon, now darkness that I lurk 1- Gotten back focus, but now faced with a decision Play safe or take the shot when he's not clear in vision 2- i know he trembles, and I know he's panick Tripping out so much yyou'd think he's estatic 1- I know where he's hiding, just behind that van But the question I wonder is does he know where I am? 2- He's just behind the sign, in the position of kneel The trigger is his sniper is what his right hand feels 1- Any sudden movement, can result in my worst But which one is better...to go second or first? 2- Will first result in my death, or will second be my death? Would I be better off if I wasn't thinking of death? 1- Fuck what my mind thinks, I must go and strike now 2- Why listen to my mind, I know I gotta strike now 1- I step out, 2- see the bitch, 1- I look steady, 2-Press click 1- Last thing I remember.... 2- Is hearin 2 clips... Last edited by T West : 02-01-04 at 11:37 AM. |
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01-31-04, 03:21 AM | #2 | |||
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IP: 1481 46A3
aight for a keystyle..nice flow
lil choppy in places..nice concept though aight vocab..good piece.....props |
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01-31-04, 03:39 AM | #3 | |||||||
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IP: C1DA C961
I liked this idea, it flowed well, which made it a better read, I thought the idea made this piece what it was, very nice concept, I liked it. Keep doing what your doing.
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01-31-04, 03:02 PM | #4 | |||||||
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IP: A10D 4933
uppin, thx for the feedback guys. Was just a quick key.
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01-31-04, 09:57 PM | #5 | |||||||
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IP: 9588 E886
uppin
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02-01-04, 12:38 AM | #6 | |||||||
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IP: A2E6 CC04
nice flow and concept...
concept would be ill on audio... just needs ta be expanded a little... dope as is though...keep spittin... |
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02-01-04, 11:37 AM | #7 | |||||||
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IP: B20F 67F7
Thx for all the feedback. You guys are great. anything else?
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