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10-24-03, 01:15 AM | #1 | ||||||
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its still me
IP: 19AF 50C1
In a 5 sentence paragraph- I tell the world 5 ways to kiss my ass-
So fuck spitting a line… Id rather give you cancer with the 2nd hand monoxide gas. After I burn a rhyme….. Rapping is my love… fucking you cats is lust- im known to provoke beaf and bust- Promote myself Doing a drive bye in my tour bus. I warned you Beating me carries impossible probability- Defeating me carries twice that in possibility. Fuck you! battle me! punchline for punchline id burn my fertility Taking your virginity -take 50% when you collect disability. Half of you are stans the other half fans- You wack crew can say my name on track but understand- You aint fazing me just saven me money on a hypeman. I feel like gang bang porn one man surrounded by cunts- Your timid skills are frigid gimics torn ….. you only flip on mics as a publicity stunt. I don’t care who gave you props-who’s your pops- Chances are I don’t even know them….so just stop. Chances are… biting they rhymes is why your album flopped- Make a super crew and go boy band for pop. All I do is fire shot covered in diss- Directed at no one but everyone so I never miss. These fakes swear they BOYZ IN THE HOOD- But their MALE BONDING looks like them fags from THE WOOD. I CAPITOL~IZE it to make sure its understood. GAS IS THE ONLY THING YOU BE CYPHERING- YOUR CREW AINT GHETTO THEY JUST TRYFLING. I’ll shit my draws-sooner then it would take to list your flaws. Use the wire bra from your girls breast cavaty to give you a wired jaw. Then use her 3 holes for a menajetwa. Force you to watch ducked taped your fucked she’s raped that how I react- Strat doggystyle on her rectom crack-force you to see that- for trying to fuck me.. now im show you how I fuck back. Fuckl you if you cant beat me and scream that im wack- Bitches pussy, and dick size I got ….that’s a fact.. But you dickride.. a loose ass hole is the only thing your careers has mines lack. Now that proved im better than you im use the finisher-to deminsh ya- My shits hot I have to wipe my ass with a fire extinguisher. Gave you a thousand word start and the only picture you paint- Was white on white the chances of me loosing look faint. Touring with R.KELLY is the only way you reaching kids- Fuck you faget you aint even half the man RU PAUL is. |
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10-24-03, 02:07 AM | #2 | ||||||
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This was a fuckin dope read dawg
I warned you Beating me carries impossible probability- Defeating me carries twice that in possibility. ^^^loved this line all your peices are enjoyable to read... and you alwys give me good feedback so i figured i would return the favor... Im not sure WHO you are talking to in this... but it is pretty damn powerful. This wasnt your best ever... but it was still not the worst. There are some parts where i could quite catch the flow... but overall it came out clean... good job... i liked some of the multies and metas in here... some shit that accually makes you think you know? good shit... keep it up dawg |
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10-24-03, 05:56 AM | #3 | ||||
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this shit was dope like a scope...had some nice punchez up in there and overall this was a dope diss...all ya gotta do is work on them damn multiez damnit...at least now...you ending ya linez with multi-syllable wordz that make it sound almost like a multi...
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10-24-03, 08:59 AM | #4 | ||||||
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more good shit
never read a piece of yours and been dissapointed the flow was good for the most part and this was written with some passion which helped its readability...some of the lines were dope the fire extinguisher on the ass...funny shit few other really good lines....overall more hot shit props |
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10-24-03, 11:23 AM | #5 | |||||||
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this was well put together, and the content kept me reading, i thought the opener was funny as fuck, and there was alot of good lines, with a good flow goin thru the piece.................good drop....peace
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10-24-03, 11:47 AM | #6 | ||||||
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IP: 19AF 50C1
thank you that means alot to me for realz
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10-24-03, 12:23 PM | #7 | |||||||
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ill shit daddy. nice wordplay like the fags from the wood line. One+
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10-24-03, 01:36 PM | #8 | ||||||
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I was feeling this piece. . I mean occasionaly you dropped a dud line. . Well compared to the others. .But thats the small bit of critisism i got for you along with the flow that fell off a lil bit. .
BUT your content was great & very funny & enjoyable. . The flow was very nice. .Vocab & all the other elements were there. . Props |
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10-25-03, 01:24 AM | #9 | ||||||
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IP: 19AF 50C1
PLEASE POP HIT ME WITH WHERE I NEED TO IMPROVE WHAT LINES NEED TO BE RE DONE
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