Before I fell for love, it had me slipping
During the drop I felt my heart beat skipping//
And as me being a man I had to admit it
That it was more than 1 thing that had me tripping for you//
Lie detectors say this feeling is true
in crowded rooms the only one I’m feeling is you//
I’m serious boo I know this so certainly
U’ve given me strength it’d be hard to murder me//
My pulse rate’s jumpin like track stars hurdling
Since u’ve taken my heart like transplant surgeries//
I never knew love like this before
Feeling all bubbly like Crys and Mo//
This and mo is what you’re doing to me
This control I’m losing it as you can see//
Shooting me is cupid continuously
Hovering above ground I continue to be //
Amazed by the way that you make me say things
Far from my norm like sudden weight gains//
Some things may change but not my love
What I need wit a pigeon when I got my dove//
I’m addicted to you she’s not my drug
It wouldn’t feel right she's not my glove//
I’m the boat in the harbor. U are my tug
I will never walk over you you’re not my rug//
I cant breathe without you, you are my lungs
I am the planet that needs you you are my Sun//
And all ive done was show you through walls I’ll run
Now all I need from you is a name to call our son//



links:
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=187790

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good drop fam i enjoyed readin this i really like when u got into it durin these lines:

"Some things may change but not my love
What I need wit a pigeon when I got my dove//
I’m addicted to you she’s not my drug
It wouldn’t feel right she's not my glove//
I’m the boat in the harbor. U are my tug
I will never walk over you you’re not my rug//
I cant breathe without you, you are my lungs
I am the planet that needs you you are my Sun//"

shit was hot keep up the good work.

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ok it was ok i expect alot from you cuz your poetry is so deep this was too simple flow was a lil off vocaB needs to be much better i wasnt really feeling this fam

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vvv AND A NEW LEVEL OF HERB EMERGES vvv

^^in other words your scared running from a battle on a site made for battling and your mod so you dont have to battle you just duck and pop shit?
herb

u reading the flow like a regular text piece. this is a verse from off of my album. coming to stores July 06'. the flow is flawless when u hear it. but this isnt like my more serious work. this is gonna be 1 of my singles so it cant be too deep. i gotta reach the ladies if i wanna sell records. but thanx for the looks though

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ahh, like shakes said the dopest part n most that
iu was feeling was your last couple bars, shit was solid...
the metas in the first half couldve been more complex but you overall
aspect of this joint was real solid, its not my cup a tea but it
is a good piece, a lil short(bout 45 55 seconds)
but i deff think its worthy of recognition,...need more
women to leave feed cuz im sure they'd dive right into this kinda stuff
good drop fam, keep it up............
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n remember the negative feed is constructive criticism from fam
that respects your drops.........nice read overall..

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i'll play on ya consience, ya contents is complete nonsense
speak of biting, then you fucks flip everyone of my damn concepts
what the fuck, was you high..?
did you think i wouldn't recognize lines that i made
then you come up some bullshit tryna prove that im gay...!
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fake fucks..move on...!

ehhh. its aight not really that good..no hate but u was too basic and simple ta feel any feelins on this and daaamn what the fuck happened to these rappaz since i left everyone softened up and got too lazy with they rhymes on top of it i barily see any hooks and im only seeing one lil short verse with these peeps..godd....looks like i have ta show ya'll how ta do it again

its straight dogg...
flow like cali said was simple...but yin my opinnon it was effective, for the most part it was solid, wasnt really feelin the 1st line thru too the tripping for you line, ya started off kinda slow, but ya got better as the peice went on

keep reppin fa the fam an doin ya thing man.

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thanx yall... wait till u hear it in audio

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well i'll wait for tha audio cuz tha text wasnt hittin...still had good shit in there...but nothin really grasped me in general...return tha fava (link in sig)

-DB

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