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09-06-03, 02:15 AM | #1 | |||||||
I Like Males More
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i burn you
IP: ACF8 CCBB
my rhymes here are so acidic that they burn flames that burn to your stomach/
they create the heat that combines with solar power/ it creates so much shit that your rhymes start to turn sour/ once i burn you i crumble you up into ashes/ all black and white is what you find in trashes/ you look like a shit ass cigarette butt on the road bein run over by automobiles and other vehicles/ your gay ass butt is what gets fucked when you start to spit/ cause they are not even literate, your rhyme scheme is a joke like a skit/ your illusions are so gay you make elton john look heterosexual/ and you make benzinos songs look lyrical/ your like an expired label on a carton/ this rhyme your startin is a sin like signin to murda to get at 50 and em/ you better start to run you pussy ass hoe/ when they ask your sexuality you say i dont know/ cause you are so confused by these rhymes that they flip and spin your mind into so many positions/ that i cause submissions that make you quit/ that make you sick its like you were ja for 6 months and dissed so much he turned into a dick/
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09-06-03, 08:35 AM | #2 | ||||||
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u need work
your bar lentch was way off....too much chop and change rhyming wasnt very good....quite a few places where it was poor as a newb's boasting piece its alright seemed like u were trying to rhyme words instead of writinf a verse and fitting the rhyme scheme in with it and use word play multies to make it better |
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