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02-08-06, 02:05 PM | #1 | |||||
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Loced 2 Die
IP: ABC9 8224
Down time remains while tha clock ticks, but manic as fuck i cant stop spitz
It happenz when my complex has gone blitz, then my demonz drop clickz Dream on; the dirtiest are waitin hoes, aint even happen yet; tha case closed Till ive defeated ya childish game foes, doctors baffle over satan exposed 2 stay smokin treez; i sawed acres, I stay puttin down a G; ya'll fakerz My interrogation burns; i thaw traitors, turned chin checkin to jaw breakerz Pullin on tha draw; donz quicker, shootin all out on tha scotch liquer escapin; watched tha cops flicker, tha dopest headz here aint drop sicker I stayed livin to smoke em high, god knows i fucked the ocean dry Lookin for the devil in a hopeless sky, 3 steps from reality I'm loced 2 die |
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02-08-06, 02:17 PM | #2 | |||||
New to RV
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IP: ABC9 8224
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02-08-06, 02:32 PM | #3 | |||||||
Oye...Tu Sabes..!!
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IP: F1FC 4749
nice except you need to cut your lines a bit more......your rhyming is average so you need to up your skill on that as wel as vocab....rtf on my OM change of mind
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02-08-06, 02:52 PM | #4 | |||||
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IP: F453 D766
i feel ya but this 1 was more of a... exactly what i wanted to say....
i'll post something a little more vocab later |
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02-08-06, 03:55 PM | #5 | |||||||
Middle Weight
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IP: 215F 8CED
hmmmm it seemed like you could of done more in between line enders... had alot of nice vocab in there to not rhyme as much as you could of if you worded it a lil differently... conceptually this was pretty good... but still very short
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