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Old 09-03-04, 12:50 AM   #1
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Man and Mansions

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Man and Mansions

This house so cold, chilling, and falling to pieces
Holes in the walls where pictures used to be
Rotting wood lay where we used to dance
Windows dusty and blurred, broken so long ago
A staircase leading to a room where I left all of my problems
A door you entered to release love and fear into my heart
A lock you broke, because I was smart enough to hide the key
A mirror shattered, and it cost me more then seven years to recover
A sink so rusted and old, my wrinkles relate
I step out to the stoop where the sun used to shine down
Peer down into a garden where shrubs have overcome the beauty
Grass overgrown, obviously not being taken care of, kind of like myself
You broke me down, but I let me go
You broke me down, you... broke... me
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Old 09-03-04, 09:54 AM   #2
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dat wont rite but i like yo poem i felt it in a way
it made a lot of sense but da problem wit me
was how da flow was but overall it was a good poem
keep doin yo thang
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Old 09-12-04, 07:13 AM   #3
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lets see if someone can understand this peice.......
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Old 09-12-04, 03:01 PM   #4
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wow, this was incredible, beautiful imagery and your words were so much deeper then i think these kids realize, i'm surprised i missed this, i liked the line "a mirror shattered and it cost me seven years to recover", a bad luck type line, you know like the superstition, this would make a great song,keep it up boi, and holla at your gurl, if you want to ever collab on a piece or open mic, i like your descriptiveness
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