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10-11-04, 12:33 PM | #1 | |||||||
New to RV
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PLease Read My First Poem
IP: ACD9 67D4
Its To The October Picture In Rhetorical Insights I Just Want Feedback Too Since Its My First
*Im New At Poetry So Drop Feed If You Can Please...* I've Been Thinking Alot Lately... I Might Cry As I'm Dazed And I Gaze At The Beautiful Night Sky All Of My Memories And Every Dream Thinking It Was Meant To Be All Of The Stuff That We Did... But Nothing Was Left For Me Now This One Night Im Seeing Brings It All Back To Me Actually Maybe Im Wrong Maybe This Is What Had To Be A Night Like This... ...The Same Sky Exactly The Same Girl That Makes Me Angry Now Made Me Happy She Told Me That She Loved Me In A Special Bottled Message Telling Me How Much She Thought Of Me In A Way Thats Not Obsessive I Sailed Away A Happy Man With Her In This Low Tide Now Im All By Myself Taking A Lonely Boat Ride Because 6 Months Later ... The Breakup Was Ugly She Told Me She Hated Me... The Same Way ... She Told Me That She Loved Me.
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10-11-04, 01:44 PM | #2 | ||||||
New to RV
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IP: DA8C EBDC
dude i like that poem alot that's tight, your gonna be really great in the poetry department. keep up the good work peace
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10-11-04, 09:58 PM | #3 | |||||||
New to RV
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IP: ACD9 67D4
ayo thanx im trying il drop another one tomorrow or maybe the day after
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10-11-04, 10:52 PM | #4 | |||||
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IP: 28AD 5545
nice poem, it was damn good for your first, dope emotion and flow,, you got it, just keep droppin..pc
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10-12-04, 08:53 AM | #5 | |||||
Black Poet
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IP: 2041 AFC0
This was pretty hott man you could have got a little deeper but that will come
in time. Nice Poem. |
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10-25-04, 12:37 PM | #6 | ||||||
New to RB
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IP: 695B 24D0
can any of use tell me how 2 get da link 2 ure stuff on wen u leave feedbacks and da poem wos deep enjoyable keep dem cumin
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