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02-03-04, 11:47 AM | #1 | |
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MCrepresenta vs. Machavelli
IP: 7A19 AF0D
yo 6 bars
no crew votes no nuttin like at you gots 20 mins to spit yo n i can tell if you prewrote da shit too hit me up yall can spit first yo |
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02-03-04, 01:35 PM | #2 | |
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IP: D38E 499D
you tell me you can spit, you tell me your the manne/
but after i get through with you'll be in contant paine/ i ain't messin' around if you think i am, get to walkin'/ even though you lost you just keep on talkin'/ you cant kill me my shit is to deep// wacth out in your home us mother fuckers gon' trap you in your sleep// down on your knees! if you can pleed ain't gon' matter/ 12 gage shotty and make the blood splatter// i'll kill you with the same song// if you think your gonna beat then your DEAD WRONG!!// and when its on its gonn be somethin you don't wanna see/ i'll trap you in this battle so you won't be FREE!!// |
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02-03-04, 04:02 PM | #3 | |
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IP: 7A19 AF0D
look at this corny mutha fucka tryna use the words of biggie
after i destroy you at this ima take ova ya city its makaveli lil bitch learn how to spell the great ones name if he saw ur lil battle hed say your ashame to this game nigga i can take bullets i can take knives all up in my face but my tommy gun n my techs will deffinately put u in ya place can you taste that? its the blood on ya hand take you out far away n bury ya ass in the sand 12 gage shotty? whachu know about those guns? well they spray n they're powerful! so ima use it son ill leave u n ya crew stranded in da MC bodybag n then maybe youll realize you shouldn't a fucked wit me fag! |
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02-03-04, 04:04 PM | #4 | |
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IP: 7A19 AF0D
UPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNN the battle
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02-03-04, 04:13 PM | #5 | |
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IP: 047D 3076
MCrepresenta takes dis jst.Machavelli week puches.both not bad for newb's.flow and sturcture goes to MCrepresenta to.#
v/MCrepresenta(simply all round beta. kepp it up both of u's
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02-03-04, 04:56 PM | #6 | |
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IP: D38E 499D
man this guy can't spit tellin me bull start the voting!!
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02-03-04, 06:17 PM | #7 | |
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IP: 22D2 4A11
Ok
honestly.....??? I think they are both newbish and both could use work. However that doesn't mean I didn't like it I'll do it text book Machaveli open: 3 (work on) close: 3 (kinda frail work on) personals: 0 (def. workon) metas: needs work punches: needs work multis: 7 (they were there just up'em a lil) also try to fix up your stucture a lil even you lines out Keep back rawer next time! Props MCrepresenta open: 6 (nice ) close: 2 (was a lil dissappointed after the opener) personals: 2 (neither of you really took (personal) shots out at eachother ) metas: needs work punches: 2 multis: 6 Also MC nice structure win:MCrepresenta (I can NOT officially vote so no whining, jk) personal opinion; based on most of that Flow - MC, was structured better, which made it flow and sound better to me Punches -, some were played by both cats or lacking Multies - Obviously MC, by his type of rhyme scheme, his rhyme scheme almost always guarantees him flow and multies. If your a newb take a close look and you'll see. Vocab - Both were lacking on this Overall they were alright verses Keep elevating as ALWAYS Return the favor and give me some honest feedback on any one of my links JamesJr.
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