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Old 04-22-05, 06:27 PM   #1
Detrimental
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All Ya'll Can Back Down

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Back in this motha fucka makin other suckas and bustas run out of luck tryin to buck then back down
I let these wanna be thugs no what's up and that they'll get stuck if the try to take over AK-Town
Matter of fact now i'm back around lettin yall know that we down and not acting out backin down bein clowns
Comin back not quite but loud no silence around lettin ya'll know what i'm about showin no doubt
Maybe 13 but i aint scared whisperin and bitchin, yippin startin shit then quittin, i always finish
My business, i've always been winnin no matter what kind of shit i've been in, aint nothin that i've hidden
There's an army sittin here all within one city have 30 deep rollin with me never busy all these faggots i'm ripping
Dipping, bitches slipping never getting up never giving any mercy from all the anger people have put in me
They aint pinning me down we keep the heat with the gat next to my feet when we reach underneath the seat
Shooting all the casualties and the ones who run to me comin deep and they run the street quick and release
Pullin out our heat put out the window but they stunned to see how i shoot the torso or H-E-A-D, where ya at now?
Ya'll motha fuckas scared can't bare to see me or dare to meet me in the streets so motha fuckas BACK DOWN


MAS STRETCHED but still give me feed but don't complain about how stretched it is lol
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Old 04-22-05, 09:23 PM   #2
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Old 04-23-05, 12:26 AM   #3
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ehhhh.... too much pull my gat... look at me shoot... leave ya dead... stuff going on in ya drop... kinda diggin' ya flow, though.... it was different ...looked as if ya stretched it on purpose actually...lol... i could see how it would work... you should try and tweek that style and master it.... make it ya signature style.... very consistant.... lay off the gun talk though... that ain't gangsta.... that's making yaself a target
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Old 04-23-05, 02:55 AM   #4
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yea thanx for that feed i think i might try mastering that style....i was just trying something new....but i wasn't bein fake tho our crew does pack some heat don't get me wrong....but i don't so yea....thanx for the feed tho that does make sense about the target thing, uppin for some more feed back and i will return the favor
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Old 04-23-05, 02:56 AM   #5
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but atleast drop a link now! lol
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Old 04-23-05, 12:18 PM   #6
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uppin man! let's get some feed on this shit uppin!
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Old 04-23-05, 12:26 PM   #7
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THIS WAS AIGHT, more of a home town typa shout out i feel
no lines that really stuck out that i thought were WAY better
then the other...it was to be honest a monotonous read...
gun play was a bit overdone....stay up though, this style may work
for you with a bit more effort n thought put into it....
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i'll play on ya consience, ya contents is complete nonsense
speak of biting, then you fucks flip everyone of my damn concepts
what the fuck, was you high..?
did you think i wouldn't recognize lines that i made
then you come up some bullshit tryna prove that im gay...!
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fake fucks..move on...!
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Old 04-23-05, 02:54 PM   #8
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This was an okay drop,
It really lacked acouple things...
Mostly it lacked that you didnt have a constant structure...
It through the reader off , and it didnt want the reader wanna read it ..
Second wordplay , and vocab were blah, they werent very creative...
Nothing really stuck out ..
Keep it up , it was an average peice... think you could have done alot, better
but keep at it , hope to see anyother drop from you soon
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Old 04-23-05, 10:22 PM   #9
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yo feelin' your flow. Some good shit in this. overall I liked this. 8/10. sorry I couldn't leave more, man. My mom wants me to get off. But I liked this pc
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