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03-05-04, 04:07 AM | #1 | |||||
~SAINT SINNER~
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Savior
IP: EC0B 84C7
(This Piece Is Different From My Usual Style. Its A Personal Verse I Wrote To God. No Cursing...No Drugs...No Violence. From Me To Him. Give Me Some Feedback Please.)
(Over Jay Z's "Blueprint" Beat) Dear Lord Please Forgive Me For My Sins The Hearts Of Men Are Often Flawed Thats Why Im Lost Again So Help Me Find My Way To Break These Chains And Make A Change To Drain The Rain On Flames That Blaze And Gain A Greater Day My Smiles Have Been Forgotten Since I Lost My Grin My Closest Friends Are The Tears That Drop Off My Chin From Stocked Thoughts Locked Within Unlock This Box And Drop This Grim I Watch In Awe With Astonishment 'cuz When The Hardest Hits Your My Jaw Of Brick That Sits Strong But Never Chips Like Rocks Tossed Or Even Skipped I've Given All That I Got To Give Before I Fall You Give Me Grip Offer Oxygen When Im Out Of Wind Your My Light, My Sight, My Vision When The Darkness Hits You Never Let Me Down Never Let Me Down Gravities Opposite Who Saw An Accomplishment Instead Of A Tarnished Kid From The Stockton Strip With An Awkward Sense To Pick The Hardest When An Honest Mans Options Split Gone But Non Forget....... (I Decided To Cut It Off There. Let Me Know Your Thoughts On It.) ......Supervillain
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QUESTION: Is it even possible to improve upon perfection??? ANSWER: CRHYME SINDICATE "I remember this one time I thought I was wrong........but I was mistaken." -Unknown R.I.P. Jonathan "ONE MAN BAND/TERUMOTO" Nigro. Goodbye brother. God bless the dead. One love. Last edited by SUPERVILLAIN : 03-05-04 at 04:12 AM. Reason: SPELLING ERROR |
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03-05-04, 04:01 PM | #2 | ||||
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IP: 7A52 73B1
that was dope. i cant wait to hear your real style.
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03-05-04, 04:08 PM | #3 | |||||
~SAINT SINNER~
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IP: EC0B 84C7
Thanks For The Input My Friend. I Dig Your Shit Too, For Real. Check Out My Other Verses And Let Me Know What You Think. Holla At Ya Boy.
Supervillain............of The Crhyme Sindicate
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QUESTION: Is it even possible to improve upon perfection??? ANSWER: CRHYME SINDICATE "I remember this one time I thought I was wrong........but I was mistaken." -Unknown R.I.P. Jonathan "ONE MAN BAND/TERUMOTO" Nigro. Goodbye brother. God bless the dead. One love. |
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03-05-04, 06:20 PM | #4 | |||||
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IP: 75CE A0E1
yo supervillain that was some dope ass shit. like demolish said cant wait to hear your shit.
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03-05-04, 06:27 PM | #5 | |||||
~SAINT SINNER~
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IP: EC0B 84C7
Much Love Chekmate. I'll Keep An Eye Out For Your Work.
.........s.v. The Tyrant
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QUESTION: Is it even possible to improve upon perfection??? ANSWER: CRHYME SINDICATE "I remember this one time I thought I was wrong........but I was mistaken." -Unknown R.I.P. Jonathan "ONE MAN BAND/TERUMOTO" Nigro. Goodbye brother. God bless the dead. One love. |
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03-07-04, 01:00 PM | #7 | |||||||
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IP: 75CE A0E1
ayo that was some nice shit dawg. you had some good word play.
keep it up. |
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03-07-04, 02:18 PM | #8 | ||||
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IP: 75CE A0E1
ayo check chekmate's shit. trust me its dope try to leave some feedback for him.
peace |
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03-17-04, 12:44 AM | #9 | |||||
~SAINT SINNER~
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IP: EC0B 84C7
can i get some more feedback on this one please. also, let me know what you all think of my other verses in open mic as well. one.
s.v.
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QUESTION: Is it even possible to improve upon perfection??? ANSWER: CRHYME SINDICATE "I remember this one time I thought I was wrong........but I was mistaken." -Unknown R.I.P. Jonathan "ONE MAN BAND/TERUMOTO" Nigro. Goodbye brother. God bless the dead. One love. |
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03-18-04, 11:22 PM | #10 | |||||
~SAINT SINNER~
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IP: EC0B 84C7
can i get some more feedback on this one please. also, let me know what you all think of my other verses in open mic as well. one.
s.v.
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QUESTION: Is it even possible to improve upon perfection??? ANSWER: CRHYME SINDICATE "I remember this one time I thought I was wrong........but I was mistaken." -Unknown R.I.P. Jonathan "ONE MAN BAND/TERUMOTO" Nigro. Goodbye brother. God bless the dead. One love. |
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03-20-04, 06:27 AM | #11 | |||||
~SAINT SINNER~
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IP: EC0B 84C7
can i get some more feedback on this one please. also, let me know what you all think of my other verses in open mic as well. one.
s.v.
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QUESTION: Is it even possible to improve upon perfection??? ANSWER: CRHYME SINDICATE "I remember this one time I thought I was wrong........but I was mistaken." -Unknown R.I.P. Jonathan "ONE MAN BAND/TERUMOTO" Nigro. Goodbye brother. God bless the dead. One love. |
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03-20-04, 07:49 AM | #12 | |||||||
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IP: 898A F4DE
that was fuckin sick, the wordplay was heavy im lookin out for your next piece.
hold it |
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03-20-04, 09:44 AM | #13 | ||||
O.wning Y.ou D.aily
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IP: 18CC 30C4
DATS MY BOY!!!!!!!!!!!!!! That was the kinda shit you should be droppin all the time, That was some hot shit! Bring me some more, write this well in your battles.......
~Dope~
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03-21-04, 04:20 AM | #14 | |||||
Youngin jus call me Young
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IP: 4948 3CF8
i agree wit clorox and um enygma..ur shit wuz so damn ill...u kno i'm ya gurl that supports ya movement..but even if i wuz ur worst enemy i wud hafta give u props on that one...wow...um i am gonna print that..i'll give u props for it thooo ma nig...ill shit..unbelievable
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03-21-04, 05:26 AM | #15 | ||||
....Trunks R 4 Bodies....
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IP: 6236 079F
thats blazin shit man
and good topic to great rhyme scheme holla!!!!!!! |
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