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Old 11-09-04, 02:19 AM   #1
Teknikal
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Just the slightest site of you, sends tingles shooting down my spine/
I don’t even do my work in class, I just remember your presence, and hit the mental rewind//
Your softest touch, would send me to a state of heavenly bliss/
And to be honest, I'd need a bucket to gather myself up after every kiss//
I wish I could express myself with more then just words or actions/
I always want to reword what I say, u know, add another caption//
There's no need for further stress or confrontation in our relationship/
Just let the feelings of love and kindness flow from off your soft lips//
I sit in anticipation for whenever the next time we even see each other will be/
I think...No I know, I want you to start our own connected family//
Your the only one, in your case, there is no second or third/
Your the one I care for most, only position for you is first//
My heart has no boundaries when your name processes through my brain/
If I was to lose your love, I’d think I’d become unstable or close to insane//
We need no rings, no presents or gifts to show our true affection/
Just say the simple phrase, “I love you,” it’ll always guide us in the right direction//
True love, like you and I, acknowledge the relationship by even afar/
The amount of my emotions for you, can’t be bought, processed or jarred//
No need to fight the feelings, just let it take over body, and your regular functions/
My love for you is like a one way road, as the possibilities for us are junctions//
It isn’t measurable, nor possible to contain it/
Its amount has no mass, your face is all I need to explain it/
Let these words take note in your mind as you read each line/
My brand of feelings are impossible to find/
I honestly don’t desire any other kind//
From my optical cortex all the way to my pumping heart/
I believe that our paths should or could never part//
You being with me is the key to my locked feelings/
My love will be forever lasting, even after I stop breathing…
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Old 11-09-04, 11:53 AM   #2
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This was very good, you told a story but kept it poem like, just work on setting it up, the structure i mean, but besides that, the emotional content was in this piece, and your words were great, keep it up..1
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