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11-09-04, 02:19 AM | #1 | |||||||
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Who We Are..
IP: 33AE 4F40
Just the slightest site of you, sends tingles shooting down my spine/
I don’t even do my work in class, I just remember your presence, and hit the mental rewind// Your softest touch, would send me to a state of heavenly bliss/ And to be honest, I'd need a bucket to gather myself up after every kiss// I wish I could express myself with more then just words or actions/ I always want to reword what I say, u know, add another caption// There's no need for further stress or confrontation in our relationship/ Just let the feelings of love and kindness flow from off your soft lips// I sit in anticipation for whenever the next time we even see each other will be/ I think...No I know, I want you to start our own connected family// Your the only one, in your case, there is no second or third/ Your the one I care for most, only position for you is first// My heart has no boundaries when your name processes through my brain/ If I was to lose your love, I’d think I’d become unstable or close to insane// We need no rings, no presents or gifts to show our true affection/ Just say the simple phrase, “I love you,” it’ll always guide us in the right direction// True love, like you and I, acknowledge the relationship by even afar/ The amount of my emotions for you, can’t be bought, processed or jarred// No need to fight the feelings, just let it take over body, and your regular functions/ My love for you is like a one way road, as the possibilities for us are junctions// It isn’t measurable, nor possible to contain it/ Its amount has no mass, your face is all I need to explain it/ Let these words take note in your mind as you read each line/ My brand of feelings are impossible to find/ I honestly don’t desire any other kind// From my optical cortex all the way to my pumping heart/ I believe that our paths should or could never part// You being with me is the key to my locked feelings/ My love will be forever lasting, even after I stop breathing…
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11-09-04, 11:53 AM | #2 | |||||
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IP: 28AD 5545
This was very good, you told a story but kept it poem like, just work on setting it up, the structure i mean, but besides that, the emotional content was in this piece, and your words were great, keep it up..1
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