more stuff I needed to get off my chest, got a bit of inspiration today so I go to punchin the buttons.

I thought you ass was smart, why the fuck did you start? //
When I go off the chart, I'll rip your ass apart, //
and you gaurntee wrong, wonderin where's your alligence belong, //
you know it's gona be lifelong, when you give it a song, //
yo' angry face will compose it all writen in prose, //
to make sure his bitch ass knows, this shits gona close, //
with the death of a scouse, the match and the douse, //
so bring this shit to my house an I'll take it to your spouse, //

use my knife an give 'em a tattoo, and rip 'em up too, //
blood bath for my stew, like it ain't any shit new, //
'cause your a fuckin coward, whos gona get devoured, //
once your ass is all scouered I'll be upped an empowered, //
I'm in angry mode, light my fuse I'll fuckin' explode, //
then it's time to reload, an get crossed more than the road, //
If you took a minute to look, its you who's fuckin' shook, //
and how yo life ain't bin took is all down to luck, //

I ain't got no fuckin' regrets, wanna go to war then lets, //
who the fucks takin bets, am gona smoke this bitch like ciggarettes, //
I ain't a shy type of guy who's scared to reply an then fuckin' die, //
a view from my eye up into the sky wonderin' why all this shit over a lie, //
this battle's goin on it aint done, the shits only just begun, //
to hit people and stun, for it all to be fun, I don't need a gun, //
to take your ass down and make you look like a fuckin clown, //
put you in a hospital gown, and take this crown with a frown, //

fuck the discussion I'll just give you a concussion, //
beatin' your head like percussion, an wait for the reprocussion, //
cause you sold your fuckin' soul, and I've only got one goal, //
to lose control and bury you 6 feet deep in a huge fucking hole, //
then leave you to rot, you the one who tightened the knot, //
now I've lost the fuckin plot, I'll leave u beggin to get shot, //
like me, just wantin the lead, but I'm livin instead, //
with all the thoughts in my head, wonderin what the fucks ahead? //

Pettry Simple, but you got some thought's off ya chest
Try to use more complex vocab and wordplay,
But was a nice read, well-done, keep elevatin

-pz

Shiznit's Thoughts:

..this wasnt bad at all i mean u made it very interesting when u used simplicity...but lilke addlibb said..it wouldnt hurt to put a lil bit of complexity in it ya know...

teh vocabs were average...this was somewhat like a keystyle to me in someways but i may be wrong cuz it was like ur venting ..like it was obviously expressed on ur topic.

plain and simple...but it was nice to read ..drop more stuff

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