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08-30-04, 11:32 PM | #1 | ||||||
Banned: Biting
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*Welcome To My Life*
IP: 3FCF 03A9
**Welcome To My Life**
From hustling-to-jewelry, and using drugs-just-to-cure-me/ To roughed-up-by-security, and seeing judges-and-juries/ All of my life-was-just-purely, full of trifling-and-fury/ Until fighting-secured-me, of getting stripes-prematurely/ I went through hand-made-prisons, in man-made-systems/ That the man made strictly to appease the band-aid-victims/ Where gangs break kids-in, by slashin ya mans face chin-to-chin And ya damn fate's-pinned-in, as those in command take-limb-swings/ I can't stand the stress-in-the-bars, where death-makes-it-hard/ To confess-when-ya-charged, of groping breasts-of-the-guards/ There's nothing left-but-ya-scars, when ya left-in-the-dark/ But a mess-in-your-heart, when ya madness-turns-to-sparks/ Regrets-in-your-soul, that more than suggest-like-a-crow/ You'll be laid to rest-in-a-hole, for stabbing chests-of-ya-P.O./ Only after death-you'll-be-known, as an artist like Van-Gogh/ And not just a John-Doe, with an empty X on tagged-toes/ What is more sad-though? Then the concrete-life, where not only does heat-rise/ But it beats, slices, and executes you by your own devices/ I'll keep striving-and-living, when peace finds-me-in-heaven/ Until three-time-offenders, all get street-sign-remembrance/ |
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08-30-04, 11:38 PM | #2 | ||||||
Banned: Biting
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IP: 3FCF 03A9
feedback please
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09-01-04, 12:36 AM | #3 | ||||
Banned: Cheating
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IP: 68E4 45C0
it was aight...i liked da concept...work on structure and flow...but overall it was tite...
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09-01-04, 12:39 AM | #4 | ||||
FuCk YoU I RhYme BeTtEr
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IP: DE1C 607B
was aight G...do ure thang...work on structure and try to make it so theres no stop and go...if that makes sense...to many - - - - ...confusing...6/10...was good tho
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"I didnt choose this life, this life chose me" EveryDay Its the same old song, and the feeling is always gone
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09-01-04, 12:23 PM | #5 | |||||
Banned: Cheating
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IP: 9EF2 7F0D
i liked this shit...it was nice...nice multies and vocab...feelin the topic...shit was nice...7.5/10
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09-02-04, 12:10 PM | #6 | |||||||
Banned: Cheating
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IP: 28AD 5545
shit was tight, keep ur own flow
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