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05-15-05, 02:11 PM
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~*This Worldz A Sin So Why Hate Me For My Habits~*
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One Night Stand!must read n Reply
IP: 2029 97B3
Wobble that Azz Girl,Move To Da Music See That Pole right There,I Advise You To Use-it Have Me Dreamin Bout That Azz Under-da-Sheetz or In Da Bak Of My Car~ But No Stainz On Da Seats Tight Azz Jeans-See Ya Curvez Rotatin Pick ya Up Take Ya Out-Cuz Im Tired Of Waitin Cruise To Ma Crib,Where No one Will bug-us Have U Feelin like U In -Heaven-,but No Halos Above-Us taste So -Delicious-,This Is What Ive Been Cravin Beat that puzzy up So -hard-,Wont Be Surprise If it Caved-in(lOl) Babygirl i Know You like It, by The Expression on Ya Face Continue To Beat It Up Maybe I Should Slow Down Da Pace Pull it Out-Put It In,Cuz I Know That You Really Like That Feelin Juice -Cummin- On out,Cuz That Klit Keep Spillin I got An Idea While Dont Take A -Lunch- Break Open Ya Mouth,Cuz This (Sausage) should Taste real great Like Da Way u Do That,Lick N Nibble-A-Bit (Boppin-n-Weavin) While Ya Grippin-Da-Dik Sit Back N enjoy While I Return Da Favor Ho Screamin n Moanin, As If She Was in Labor! Get Back Up Get Ready--- For Round-Two This Night Would Have been Shyt If I Wouldnt Have Found-you Now The Nightz Over,Bye! N Now Shez Out One Night Stand,Alwayz N With-Out a Doubt  http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=190487
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05-15-05, 07:17 PM
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Cus I Jus Ma$fit Dis Shit
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IP: 9ABE 6A99
lmoa...straight for tha fuckin club!...i understand fam, it was simple but to tha point where i got tha messege...structure for text was iffy but its wrote like u would rap it i know...and jus throw dis on a crunk beat and u got a hit!...jus fix tha structure, add a basic hook, and drop anotha verse or two and u straight...7/10 at most fam...real talk
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05-16-05, 01:17 AM
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Skadoosh!
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IP: 477B D81A
aight shit
structure needs a little fixing, but it flows aight would probably work better as an audio track vocabs was fairly average, nuthin too basic, nuthin overly complex.............. nuthin to complex in there really, just straight to the point like doe said but i like that...................overall 6/10!!!! RTF!!! on my "RV Goes To War" open mic!!!!
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05-16-05, 02:54 PM
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~*This Worldz A Sin So Why Hate Me For My Habits~*
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IP: 3240 794D
to tell you the truth man i was just thinkin about shyt n typin it n never thought it would come out like it did but im surprised but thank for da FB! N i agree on da structure part,but like i said i was Thinkin N Typin!Average Yeh Pretty Average i never ever Flowed about some shyt like that so thaty was my first! but Holla Atcha Boy! oOoOOOoo Hell YEH n i Got A Battle WHOAH man Now Its On!!!
~Deucez~ (Da One N Only ~Ghost)
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