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03-15-07, 07:13 PM | #1 | |||||
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Johnny Voltaire - Oh No! (Hot Banger, Will RTF)
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03-15-07, 10:14 PM | #2 | |||||||
10:23 till i'm 86
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good beat, good chorus... your flows a lil better than last time i heard ya, but its still really choppy and doesn't flow into each line. qualities hella better and jazz, but try makin ya lines flow into each other better- werd
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03-16-07, 12:07 AM | #3 | |||||
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thanks for the feed cuzz
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03-16-07, 09:13 AM | #4 | |||||||
I'm Talented.Period.
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beat is slammin
I like ur delivery at the start...real hard lyrics became a drone after a while and I started daydreaming I like ur mechanics tho...voice/flow/etc. works here keep it up 1 |
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03-18-07, 10:33 PM | #5 | |||||
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thanks for the feed Q uppin
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03-19-07, 04:55 PM | #6 | ||||
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ya quality needs to be upped........i remember ya quality used to be a lot better.....ya flow had some parts where u were draggin the words or syllables out to fit the beat.....but ya energy is nice ya delivery is there......the hook is strate......
man the best advice i can give is add more syllables so it won't drag and the flow is more fluid....aiite man..keep droppen.. pz ~1~ |
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03-22-07, 11:15 PM | #7 | |||||
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thanks for the feed. upp
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