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Old 05-07-07, 06:39 PM   #1
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Brandon Cielasek (2-0) vs. Exact (2-0)

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Sorry guys for the late matches being set, I'll give you one extra day to complete your verses.

Brandon Cielasek vs. Exact

Week 5 - Write Away Your Thoughts
Verses Set : May 7, 2007
Verses Due : Saturday 12, 2007
Battles Close : Monday 14, 2007

PICK YOUR TOPICS HERE!
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Old 05-07-07, 06:41 PM   #2
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god dammit, Imma edit the thread, I am 2-0 you fuck.
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Old 05-07-07, 07:26 PM   #3
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Check. Sorry about that.
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Old 05-13-07, 12:36 AM   #4
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um wanna drop tomorrow..lol @ the mods needing to show late...sorry Write
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Old 05-13-07, 04:30 PM   #5
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Drop by midnight PST tonight buddy, sorry.
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Old 05-13-07, 05:02 PM   #6
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"Verge Beauty"
You’re the epitome of a frosted heart -
you’re like a missing muse that lost its art,
Like a playwright that’s lost his part,
Or a scholar that’s lost his smarts,
A verge beauty – fragile potential –
but exciting me on the exponential,
I don’t like you some days – but others
my glance is essential –
You’re cute – I love you, I want to
love your looks – and I want to study
your frame as frequently as I study my
books,
I know you’re taken but this image in
my head I’ve been makin’ is anything but
false –
I hate you but I want you at any cost,
My verge beauty – so subtle, a broken
face that’s my perception,
Something that makes me recap on my
words for a moment of recollection,
No connection – unless you speak
on a phone with the cord split at the end,
I’m at a split decision again, but I don’t
know where to begin… Verge beauty –
your face is a melting pot of ugliness,
but on Wednesday you’ll be pretty again.
Fit in with the crowd but prepare for a
butterfly effect to take place – bad taste.
You leave kisses in my mouth…

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Old 05-14-07, 12:06 AM   #7
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Cup Uh Joe

Drink it up
The story never ends
I am love
With a better friend


The beautiful news is portrayed and sold
While sweet inscence is displayed in gold
Dismayed, I fold; I let go of great and old
Making bold the subtleties that lay in cold
But the steam rises and soothes my spirit
The innocence that we choose to hear is
Fluffy, smooth interference of marshmallow
I belong to the heart of a loving, smart fellow
My father is all I have, I can't sip on the cup
Take a seat and let's chat, I'm listening up
Sharing this heart, entwined with the mind
Caffeine is fine, but beauty blinds me tonight
Finding light to make a new path to step in
While the brown sugar leads to the question
So what should be said about thankfulness
If you never show that you care about this
Her hand fits mine without touch of gloves
But love me tonight because Joe equals love

So kiss me sweet
And love me tender dove
When next we meet
We'll share a cup of love
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Old 05-14-07, 06:20 PM   #8
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Vote- Brandon

this was a great battle...But Brndon came with a great original concept that just kind of took m in a bit more. Exact your piece was good but not quite as original. Both were pretty even skill wise, so imagination is the deciding factor.

Good battle.
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Old 05-16-07, 10:12 AM   #9
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v/Brandon

Felt his concept alot more then exact's.... the storyline was better i liked the way his flowed compared to exact's... the imagery was about the same in both pieces but what stood out was brandon's emotion to me in this piece.

exact you still got some work to do but you almost there
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Brandon wins, 2-0.

Brandon (3-0) - Exact (2-1)
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