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05-07-07, 06:39 PM | #1 | ||||||
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Brandon Cielasek (2-0) vs. Exact (2-0)
IP: BD5A E73F
Sorry guys for the late matches being set, I'll give you one extra day to complete your verses.
Brandon Cielasek vs. Exact
Week 5 - Write Away Your Thoughts Verses Set : May 7, 2007 Verses Due : Saturday 12, 2007 Battles Close : Monday 14, 2007 PICK YOUR TOPICS HERE!
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05-07-07, 06:41 PM | #2 | |||||
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IP: 7DD3 91C6
god dammit, Imma edit the thread, I am 2-0 you fuck.
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05-07-07, 07:26 PM | #3 | ||||||
astro-travellin`
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IP: BD5A E73F
Check. Sorry about that.
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05-13-07, 12:36 AM | #4 | |||||
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IP: E641 D0AA
um wanna drop tomorrow..lol @ the mods needing to show late...sorry Write
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05-13-07, 04:30 PM | #5 | |||||
Lyrical
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IP: 117D 2878
Drop by midnight PST tonight buddy, sorry.
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05-13-07, 05:02 PM | #6 | ||||||
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IP: 9FF8 D01E
"Verge Beauty"
You’re the epitome of a frosted heart - you’re like a missing muse that lost its art, Like a playwright that’s lost his part, Or a scholar that’s lost his smarts, A verge beauty – fragile potential – but exciting me on the exponential, I don’t like you some days – but others my glance is essential – You’re cute – I love you, I want to love your looks – and I want to study your frame as frequently as I study my books, I know you’re taken but this image in my head I’ve been makin’ is anything but false – I hate you but I want you at any cost, My verge beauty – so subtle, a broken face that’s my perception, Something that makes me recap on my words for a moment of recollection, No connection – unless you speak on a phone with the cord split at the end, I’m at a split decision again, but I don’t know where to begin… Verge beauty – your face is a melting pot of ugliness, but on Wednesday you’ll be pretty again. Fit in with the crowd but prepare for a butterfly effect to take place – bad taste. You leave kisses in my mouth…
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05-14-07, 12:06 AM | #7 | |||||
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IP: 117D 2878
Cup Uh Joe Drink it up The story never ends I am love With a better friend The beautiful news is portrayed and sold While sweet inscence is displayed in gold Dismayed, I fold; I let go of great and old Making bold the subtleties that lay in cold But the steam rises and soothes my spirit The innocence that we choose to hear is Fluffy, smooth interference of marshmallow I belong to the heart of a loving, smart fellow My father is all I have, I can't sip on the cup Take a seat and let's chat, I'm listening up Sharing this heart, entwined with the mind Caffeine is fine, but beauty blinds me tonight Finding light to make a new path to step in While the brown sugar leads to the question So what should be said about thankfulness If you never show that you care about this Her hand fits mine without touch of gloves But love me tonight because Joe equals love So kiss me sweet And love me tender dove When next we meet We'll share a cup of love
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05-14-07, 06:20 PM | #8 | ||||
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IP: 26FD 62AE
Vote- Brandon
this was a great battle...But Brndon came with a great original concept that just kind of took m in a bit more. Exact your piece was good but not quite as original. Both were pretty even skill wise, so imagination is the deciding factor. Good battle. |
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05-16-07, 10:12 AM | #9 | |||
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v/Brandon
Felt his concept alot more then exact's.... the storyline was better i liked the way his flowed compared to exact's... the imagery was about the same in both pieces but what stood out was brandon's emotion to me in this piece. exact you still got some work to do but you almost there
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05-16-07, 06:20 PM | #10 | ||||||
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IP: 9FF8 D01E
Brandon wins, 2-0.
Brandon (3-0) - Exact (2-1)
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