As the clock strikes twelve, the moon rises above
The suns nowhere to be seen, and it is dark thereof
Get shoved into darkness and be saved by the light
Tonight is the night, we all get along and dont fight
Its right, listen to the music, feel the beat
Connect with the underground, and feel the street
Throw the beat on repeat, let the flows pour out
Take a different route, plant the seed in your mind let it sprout
See im knoweldgable about, things when it come to this
Dont rap dwelling on the past, just sit and reminisce (reminisce)
It Exists in the mind, in the back of the mind where you can find
Anything thats traped in time, aged like a fine wine
Its time to dine, feast, eat the food on your plate
you wont get more till you finish what you have
Im glad, that i wasnt raised as an underprivelaged child
So now im grown not rappin about myself runnin wild
Cause as a kid i always smiled, but that has seemed to fade away
Fade away to the days when the only thing i had to was to play
And it seems so far away, like a million year behind me
But i sit and reminisce and little things remind me

Sounded good to me, flow was good, structure, nice topic too, kinda makes me wanna be a kid again.

thx.. uppin for more feedback

Good solid flow throughout...Vocab was good but could of been better...Just comparing to G.Hod...lmao

Your contents and ability to stay on topic was shown here...

Props

Peep mine and Thugz collab....Pz

wuz ghoood this was a good drop you reppin the fam well

^^thanks for the GREAT feedback... that will SOOO help me elevate

lmao ^^^^
heres your feed dawgy...
flow- your flow was good, you stuck to a good rhyme scheme,
and it didnt fall off... you was consistent in the way you rhymed.

Throw in some multies... they always lead to astonishment, and
can often be the winning factor in battles, open mics, ect...

Vocab- was pretty basic except for a few words... if you throw in
some good vocab... it shocks the fuck out the reader, and plus it
shows that you are intelligent.

Wordplay- didnt see much of that either... dont really need it in a
drop like this... you did good in this area.

Content- your topic was great, overall, it was a rare topic and I
enjoyed reading this... plus your ability to stay on topic is outstanding... I'm givin you mad props on that dawgy... your ability to stay on topic is what made this piece a great drop...
keep droppin fam... I hope this feedback helps...
A.T.

"flow- your flow was good, you stuck to a good rhyme scheme,
and it didnt fall off... you was consistent in the way you rhymed.

Throw in some multies... they always lead to astonishment, and
can often be the winning factor in battles, open mics, ect...

Vocab- was pretty basic except for a few words... if you throw in
some good vocab... it shocks the fuck out the reader, and plus it
shows that you are intelligent.

Wordplay- didnt see much of that either... dont really need it in a
drop like this... you did good in this area.

Content- your topic was great, overall, it was a rare topic and I
enjoyed reading this... plus your ability to stay on topic is outstanding... I'm givin you mad props on that dawgy... your ability to stay on topic is what made this piece a great drop...
keep droppin fam... I hope this feedback helps...
A.T."

^^^ Damn, I cant hate that. I agree, 1

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" So for the 2nd time [The Pharisses] summoned the man who had been blind and said
"Speak the truth before God. We know this man is a sinner."
"Wether he is a sinner I do not know."
:The man replied:
"All I know is this...Once I was blind and now I can see"
John 1x 24-26

thanks thats the shit i was lookin for

The flow was good for one thing. The topic was unique, it was well structured. Other than lacking multies and metas it was a good drop. Stay active fam.

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