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01-19-05, 06:16 PM | #1 | |||||||
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I'mma Make Money
IP: 1F6B EAD3
yeah....... feel dis 1 aint no other way when u broke as fuck ya know? but it aint no thang i'mma make mine stressin and dealin with strain it's racking my brain i'm stuck in the game it's simple and plain fuck the fame i aint no celebrity i'm gettin felonies ready to die cuz poverty's gettin tha best of me i got a plan i got a van i got some niggaz 2 ride 4 me man and i got fam i need grands i'll make some money however i can robbin and duckin not givin a fuck cus shit gets thirsty when you in a rut i'm killin and dealing and makin a livin niggas is stealin whatever i'm gettin so i gotta ride and i gotta take just to provide dawg give me a break life aint easy and times is hard i'm tryin 2 stay from behind bars hustlin strugglin and doin these shows mackin these broads pimpin these hoes when niggas act funny tha kid gets gully some way some how even if i gotta take money imma make money mayne imma make money niggas is crusin on fools thats breakin tha rules because they aint true to payin they dues this life is so crule everythings fuled on usin them tools 2 get us some jewels but i aint no dummy i rip one dunny when shit gets funny tha kid fakes gully cuz somehow nigga i gotta make money even if it seems that i gotta take money when shit gets funny imma get gully imma make money mayne imma make money switchin up flows for tha lame i'm half way insane slangin this yayo all day yo got my mind stuck on cocaine what can i do but slang in this dirty game it's so profound only way to get us out tha hood is sellin these pounds evading poverty through bank robberies is there another way at the rate i'm goin i must be the son of God headed for better days my momma looks so helpless we cant be selfish or we'll lose it everything the house the car her wedding ring i had to do it started out sellin on Rimrock moved to Ashcroft in a year nobody knew what was in my Timb box and i still hide it with fear what would you do in my situation? so much bullshit i'm facing still i'm looked down on but my neighbor's a fuckin rapist see this world's crooked look at the hand i've been dealt and make a move you'd end up where i am in my shoes slangin dope now wouldn't you? niggas is crusin on fools thats breakin tha rules because they aint true to payin they dues this life is so crule everythings fuled on usin them tools 2 get us some jewels but i aint no dummy i rip one dunny when shit gets funny tha kid fakes gully cuz somehow nigga i gotta make money even if it seems that i gotta take money when shit gets funny imma get gully imma make money mayne imma make money
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01-19-05, 06:20 PM | #2 | |||||||
ready 4 wuteva
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IP: 1F6B EAD3
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01-19-05, 06:35 PM | #3 | |||||
Banned: Cheating
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IP: 9736 B82A
dis was raw...8/10...keep brangin dat heat...
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01-19-05, 06:49 PM | #4 | |||||||
ready 4 wuteva
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IP: 1F6B EAD3
^^ thanx 4 tha feed mayne.........uppin
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01-19-05, 07:34 PM | #5 | |||||||
Life is a Constant Battle
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IP: 3341 6359
i liked it also gotta give ya a 8/10 you told the story had some flow,rhymes stuck to each other...big ups kid. The structure was alright changed it up alittle but it was koo.if ya want any more feedback just let me know
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01-19-05, 09:56 PM | #6 | |||||||
ready 4 wuteva
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IP: 04DF 87D4
uppin.......................
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01-20-05, 08:29 PM | #7 | |||||||
ready 4 wuteva
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IP: DB6F A83E
uppin............................
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01-20-05, 11:02 PM | #8 | ||||
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IP: 7E72 4344
shit was real, vocab was a lil simple in some lines but made for a better piece, story stayed apparent through out the whole drop, i enjoyed readin it after i got my magnifying glass out haha.. shit was ill please repay favor "too fresh" on open mic.. peace
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01-21-05, 11:14 PM | #9 | |||||||
ready 4 wuteva
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IP: 2EF7 A767
aight mayne i'll have 2 check that out 4 u........uppin
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01-22-05, 10:15 PM | #10 | |||||||
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IP: F3FE 792D
uppin..........
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01-22-05, 11:06 PM | #11 | |||||
Banned: Cheating
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IP: CF38 FCAC
your first verse was to simple and not reall stuctured good but it flowed well and the rest of your lines were good, good stucture n shit..but for the whole verses all them they were pretty good, good vocabulary and metas seen a few in there good creativty and imagery just a pretty good topic stayed on it well and jsut came out good...try making a chorus in there give it some touch..ight...but yea good verse but try using more vocab to make it define more and use more emotion then you did not to much emotion...pz
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01-22-05, 11:17 PM | #12 | |||||||
a.k.a prozak
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IP: AC89 8AF5
yo that was really good but the only thing i didn't like was the font it was too small and weird i could bearily make out da words but when i did it was pretty good
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01-22-05, 11:31 PM | #13 | |||||||
ready 4 wuteva
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IP: F3FE 792D
^^ thanx 4 tha feed.....uppin dis 1
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