8-10 lines
no hate, d/r, crew votes
i spit 1st

this is my 1st EVER battle so dont laugh

I came into battling, first time ever
how tha fuck did u get that record? u musta never battled legends never
ur 13 and ur bottom of ur class but think ur clever
i seen ur pic and u think ur a gangsta
no ur not ur straight from bel-air like all the rest of the wanksta
u think ur cool cause u gotta a crew
they only tryin 2 make u feel better cause nobody likes u

ayt that was wack by me but things can only get better

you say 8-10 lines and you only spit 7!??
`shit

true!d wasnt lyin, his wackness is a fact
youll be crushed by my tactical impact
ill hit u so fast, youll be dead b4 u can react
dont even fuck wit ice, its bad for your heart
your flow should b illegal,like workers at WalMart
wit that wack ass talent, that you call art
your a newb, wit no stats or nothin displayed
a merkin in the makin, true d, gettin sprayed
im unleashin pure rhymes, furiously raged
this guy wishes he was "wild", but hes still caged

* he wants wild rhymes, get it animals in the wild, to animals in captivity r caged
* wal mart got busted for havin over 100 illegal immigrant workers
* he has no profile or battle record

uppin....................

I came into battling, first time ever
how tha fuck did u get that record? u musta never battled legends never
^played concept and bad structure, could have been worded better
ur 13 and ur bottom of ur class but think ur clever
i seen ur pic and u think ur a gangsta
^try at a personal, but didnt really hit... and didnt rhyme
no ur not ur straight from bel-air like all the rest of the wanksta
^dont like uneven shit, keep it in bars, set the punch up better
u think ur cool cause u gotta a crew
they only tryin 2 make u feel better cause nobody likes u
^weak punch for a closer. and again the structure needs work


true!d wasnt lyin, his wackness is a fact
youll be crushed by my tactical impact
^nice flow, but not really a good punch...
ill hit u so fast, youll be dead b4 u can react
dont even fuck wit ice, its bad for your heart
your flow should b illegal,like workers at WalMart
wit that wack ass talent, that you call art
^again nice flow... but ya aint really punching hard enough
your a newb, wit no stats or nothin displayed
a merkin in the makin, true d, gettin sprayed
^ok personal... this hit a bit harder
im unleashin pure rhymes, furiously raged
this guy wishes he was "wild", but hes still caged
^average punch.... dont hold up much for a closer tho

im giving this to Ice, he came at it harder, with a better structure... and connected more... tho not really hard..... vote=ice
.....return the favour.....

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this was one sided cause ice just delivered a better rap. punches don't count for shit if they don't deliver. true stick with it though.
Ice that piece bout wal-mart was nice though.
ice won this one

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I came into battling, first time ever
how tha fuck did u get that record? u musta never battled legends never
^bahahah ahahha ahahha.....oh.....ahahh weak son weak...
ur 13 and ur bottom of ur class but think ur clever
^wheres the rhyme to this line...?....
i seen ur pic and u think ur a gangsta
no ur not ur straight from bel-air like all the rest of the wanksta
^NEVER use gangsta wangsta.....EVER~!!!
u think ur cool cause u gotta a crew
they only tryin 2 make u feel better cause nobody likes u
^this was weak....sorry dog whackness emergency center calls...


true!d wasnt lyin, his wackness is a fact
youll be crushed by my tactical impact
^meh its an alright opener
ill hit u so fast, youll be dead b4 u can react
^where is the restof this bar!!!!!!!
dont even fuck wit ice, its bad for your heart
your flow should b illegal,like workers at WalMart
^lol you dissed walmart hardcore...now try true d....
wit that wack ass talent, that you call art
^blah fuckin rhyme sets of three....
your a newb, wit no stats or nothin displayed
a merkin in the makin, true d, gettin sprayed
^this is an ok multi....a weak punch
im unleashin pure rhymes, furiously raged
this guy wishes he was "wild", but hes still caged
^this is old and played....you still won but bad verse...
return the favor...
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=111150

Iceman takes this with ease..

More creative and original punches.. better structure and flow.. much better vocab.. basically every catergory there is to take.. wasn't the best verse ever but it was more than enough here...
True D.. try and think up some witty bars.. instead of the played shit.. be more original...
Also the structure was slightly off at times... try to keep all the lines the same length to help the verse flow overall..
An attempt at a personal which was good.. but the verse was lackin in comparison..
Overall.. one sided

Vote - Iceman..

Return the favour - http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=110646

final uppin,, need 2 more votes//////////////////////////////

True!D didn't do to good on his flowing and he had no structure. What really got me was da fact dat he didn't have an equal number of lines.......come on now get real dawg. True!D really isn't dat good with his verse in structure and delivery of rhymes was not all dat great and they were real basic but dat don't matter. Iceman....i've saw you come much stronger in battles than dis dawg but for you dis is below average and unexpected. Iceman's punch line was not dat good but alright I guess and since they both didn't really have punches... the one with da better dissing and harder hitting verse wins so there you go Iceman get ma vote. True!D you should visit da whackness forum Q&A seriously get da help man and Iceman stop playing around with newbs because I know you could of merked him much better than dat and you know too........ both keep elevating and getting better it'll come to ya'll, o.k. battle didn't really enjoy.

vote=Iceman

check ma battles dawg in serious need of poll votes aight..............................

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=109978
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=110451

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this battle was extremely one sided. that being becuz ice just had punches. true, you just sorta rambled. didn't have any rhyme to it...forced punches...if the ones you say u had are actually considered punches, and your struc is fucked...
vote-ice

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. - Feeble Minded

Vote disqualified for suspected d/r. prophacyz has voted for Iceman 3 times in the span of 9 minutes. - Axiom

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