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What My Blade Of Rage Does..

As the sword leaves it's origin of a shield.. the Chemist violent ways is Revealed.

Sling!!.. The death sentence you face from a mysterious Blade
Seeing your own reflection as your humanity takes another Stage.
Gore massacre and sinew, My Blade cuts threw, The thrust is shrewd
leaving your facial expression open,without physical, a sight of an Omen
an individual of six senses, gets shredded with a Onimusha Ninja's weapon.
As my wrist gets aligned with my fist, with one stroke blood and flesh Drips.
As I establish, the true meaning of Violence, My perfect point causes more damage.
Victims from WarLords are left Famished, Leave it to my Blade of -Silver- to leave em vanished.
When I swing the wind takes meaning to my sword, Swwwifttt your pain and suffering is no more
scorn, warned, and torn is your complexion as wrinkles sets in.

Taking Action

Moving...Cutting intersection inside you intestines, so when victims catch erection
My blade of origin comes as a knowledgeable -Core-Ection-.
Im starting to make perplex moves with a Blade that heals wounds
and pain that smoothes and sooths your most unpeaceful thoughts.
To individuals,im the best physical -Therapist- the way physically they
label my Blade 'The Rapist' (Therapist), The Chemist uses a Blade
that involves elements of acid mixed with photics so when it hits you'll
See the -Light- with an -Explosion- erosion, from a chemical touch,
Now feel a twist when I create increments in individuals tongues.

Boom

Critique please....
and everything I script isn't pre-written all off the top...I used to do Ciphers..
Some can relate..

Im only going to upp this a couple of times and say don't sleep or be lazy..

Upppppppin..

dat was good..but kinda long lol, interestin shit and ya got into some detail for some of it,over itz good

Thanks for response...
Yes I like to go into detial..especially when it comes to hurt suffering or violence...it's a venting process...

Uppin though I think this piece should get more reviews more input..
would be appreciated..

..this was very nice....very emotional???..anyway..I enjoyed your content..everything flowed very well..good vocab..good scheme..simply..good piece..this shouldn't be slept on...peace...

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Thanks bro...
the input helps me out a lot
Clicking on free stuff...

Oh yes this was very emotional

My Nigga thiz wuz Tight
this line wuz juzt nasty
leaving your facial expression open,without physical, a sight of an Omen
an individual of six senses, gets shredded with a Onimusha Ninja's weapon.

Upping This Piece its hott..

If You Call This Emotional All You Wrote about was killing ppl with your sword...I guess it was ok not something I would write but interresting in it's own little way...it flow'd pretty well in the beginning but when i started reading it most of it didn't rhyme so i'd say 4/10

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