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10-04-03, 11:39 AM | #1 | ||||||
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<Last Minute [lost chances]>
IP: 4577 CD9A
I posted part of this before, but didn't finish it... here's the finished one... check it...
Hey yo last minute decisions, can cause manic friction, this no contradiction// I mean what I’m saying, don’t think that I’m playing, if your ass delaying// then your ass is slaying your chances, then praying for answers, see when time advances, and you don’t enhance shit// you’re loosing that moment, loose grip as you hold it, it slips and you lost it// don’t wait till that happens, whatever you’re plotting, like rapping, or stacking, relaxing and slacking ain’t getting you where shit is happening// I’m serious, don’t think shit’s delirious, the shit may just leave you frustrated and furious, then curious// bout why didn’t you do it, you had it but threw it, you blew it// you knew it was time, but you put it aside, till the shit got diluted in time// into nothing, you still think I’m bluffing// this something to put into mind, shit I put it in mine, after loosing bout all that was mine// they say time is more precious then gold, then my life was just measured and sold// now I’m anxious to make it with bold-type of movements, but see dawg it’s useless, cause all that I do ends as other’s amusement// Damm! I hesitated, I waited, and never made it, I hate it, me and my dreams separated// why did it end up like this, because I laid back my fists, didn’t connect and now I try but I miss, you get the message in this?// Look at the future never chase down the past, find all that suits ya’ never let that shit pass, cause once a loser it’s hard to get off your ass// There, that be my lesson, one session// of seconds in time, worth not forgetting for the rest of your lives… |
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10-04-03, 06:12 PM | #2 | |||||||
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IP: B20F 67F7
It's good, tho a few phrases didnt make sense like the manic friction one and a few others.
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10-04-03, 06:50 PM | #3 | ||||||
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IP: C1DA C961
i thought this piece was hott it had good mets, vocab, and it flowed well too. Keep this type of shit coming real nice piece son
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10-04-03, 10:06 PM | #4 | ||||
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IP: 9C1E 2B43
Yeah i agree this was a pretty good piece, it was worth the read, it flowed pretty well through out the piece came off a few times at some places, its content was good, and you had good vocab, overall it was a good piece, keep dropping.
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10-04-03, 10:46 PM | #5 | |||||||
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Masta pleeze!
anyway yea it was pretty tight... but i have to sit somewhere in between K and Co and say that some lines only made sorta sense... ya feel? {Peace}
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10-06-03, 12:59 PM | #6 | ||||||
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IP: C1DA C961
I guess... should've told me which ones.... I could have explained them to you... lol...
thanx for the feedback y'all... |
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10-09-03, 10:11 PM | #7 | ||||||
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IP: C1DA C961
yo, where the rest of y'all at, come on...
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10-10-03, 05:58 PM | #8 | ||||||
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IP: C1DA C961
yo?
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10-10-03, 06:47 PM | #9 | ||||||
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IP: FB0D 245E
its a good piece, not bad of a drop
fo real keep doing ya thang man 1 |
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11-05-03, 09:58 PM | #10 | ||||||
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IP: 4577 CD9A
cool... glad you was feeling it, a bit more of your thoughts about it would've been better, but it's cool... thanx..
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